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Write a letter to one of your old teachers asking for a reference. In your letter: say what job you have applied for explain why you want this job suggest what information the teacher should include

Write a letter to one of your old teachers asking for a reference. In your letter: say what job you have applied for explain why you want this job suggest what information the teacher should include VDnQ
ear Mr Peterson, Hope this letter finds you in good health and spirit. I am one of your students at the high school where you were teaching chemistry about 12 years ago. I know that it has been a while since I was in touch with you, but now I could really use your help in getting a job which I have always wanted. So, I am writing this letter to ask for a letter of reference from you. I need that letter of reference because I am applying for the position of Manager at a very famous and international group of hotels. By the way, I want this job so badly because it would allow me to travel all over the world and build a solid career in the hotel industry, which I have always wanted to do from my childhood. So, kindly write a letter of reference for me that would include information like how long you have known me, what kind of student I really was, and whether or not I was involved in any anti-social activities. Please also don’t forget to mention that I was a team leader of the debate team of my high school for a long time. Thank you in advance. Yours sincerely, Jerry Henderson
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Mr Peterson,

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health and spirit. I am one of your students at the high school where you were teaching chemistry about 12 years ago. I know that it has been a while since I was in touch with you,
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in getting a job which I have always wanted.
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of reference from you.

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of reference
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and international group of hotels. By the way, I want this job
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me to travel all over the world and build a solid career in the hotel industry, which I have always wanted to do from my childhood.

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, kindly write a
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of reference for me that would include information like how long you have known me
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, what
kind of student I
really
was, and
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whether or not
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was involved
in any anti-social activities.
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don’t forget to mention that I was a team leader of the debate team of my high school for a long time.

Thank you in advance.

Yours
sincerely
,

Jerry Henderson

IELTS letter Write a letter to one of your old teachers asking for a reference. In your letter: say what job you have applied for explain why you want this job suggest what information the teacher should include

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  American English
7 paragraphs
211 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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