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You are going to take a short holiday in Singapore and you want to rent a holiday apartment while you are there. Write to the tourist information office. In your letter: explain what you need say when you plan to be there ask for information about prices

You are going to take a short holiday in Singapore and you want to rent a holiday apartment while you are there. Write to the tourist information office. In your letter: explain what you need say when you plan to be there ask for information about prices pOEa
Dear Mr. Jee I am writing this letter to inquire about the packages for the apartment in the Orchard Lane or in the area. I’m looking for 2 bedroom with preferably 2 bathroom apartment which has a beautiful view and an easy access to trains and buses. I was advised by my friends who visited Singapore before to book apartment as it would be more convenient and economical. I’m visiting Singapore from March 21st to March 27th. But I need the apartment starting from March 21st till March 25th because the last two days we will be spending in bangkok. We shall reach Singapore from March 21st by 1100 hours and will directly move into the apartment. I would appreciate if you could send me all the details of the apartment including the cost, taxes and any other cost. If you could also include the pickup and drop off cost from the airport on March 21st and March 27th that would be really grateful. Looking forward to hear from you. Thank you so much. Yours faithfully, Udyan Luthra
Dear Mr.
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Jee


I am writing this letter to inquire about the packages for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
apartment
in the Orchard Lane or in the area. I’m looking for 2 bedroom with
preferably
It appears that a hyphen is missing.
2 bathroom
Possible agreement error. The noun 'apartment' seems to be countable, so consider using: "apartments".
apartment
which has a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
beautiful
view and
Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply "easy access".
an easy access
to trains and buses.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
was advised
by my friends who visited Singapore
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before
to book
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
apartment
as it would be more convenient and economical.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
’m visiting Singapore from March 21st to March 27th.
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But
I need the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
apartment
starting from March 21st till March 25th
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
the last two days we will be spending in
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bangkok
. We shall reach Singapore from March 21st by 1100 hours and will
directly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
into the apartment.

I would appreciate if you could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
me all the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
apartment
including the cost, taxes and any other cost. If you could
also
include the pickup and drop off cost from the airport on March 21st and March 27th that would be
really
grateful.

Looking forward
In the grammatical structure 'look + forward + to + verb', the verb 'to' is used with the gerund: "to hearing".
to hear
from you. Thank you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
much.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Udyan
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Luthra

IELTS letter You are going to take a short holiday in Singapore and you want to rent a holiday apartment while you are there. Write to the tourist information office. In your letter: explain what you need say when you plan to be there ask for information about prices

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
177 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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