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Write a letter to a travel agent expressing your dissatisfaction with their facilities due to a problem you had on a holiday (478899)

Write a letter to a travel agent expressing your dissatisfaction with their facilities due to a problem you had on a holiday (478899) pgYd
Dear sir/madam, I am writing to you express my dissatisfaction regarding the trip which I have taken through your company. Let me explain, I traveled 1 of October, I was shocked by the standard of food, comfort and safety. Company promised that the trip will be started exit at 8 'o clock in the morning but it was taken 2 hours extra due to driver who was came late on that day, it mood was spoiled. Also, mobile phone was used by driver while driving and top of that, drive very fast in the narrow roads which make trip uncomfortable. To make it more worse, as you know that winter season is running, but hotels AC could not turned switch off besides this, blanket was not provided by hotel management due to this I caught from fever next day and unable to enjoy remaining trip. What is more, we went restaurant in order to take lunch but it did not offered by the restaurant when we asked about it from manger, he told us they do not include the charges of lunch so that if we want to take lunch, we would had to pay extra for it. apart from this, staff members was not co-operative with clients, they were argumentative by nature I feel, I am entitled to a full refund and a written apology for the misinformation contained in your advertisement. I hope to hear from you regarding this matter as soon as possible. Yours faithfully, xyz
Dear sir/madam,

I am writing to you express my dissatisfaction regarding the trip which I have taken through your
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company
.
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Let
me
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explain
, I traveled 1 of October, I
was shocked
by the standard of food, comfort and safety.

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Company
promised that the trip will be
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started
exit at 8 'o clock in the morning
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but
it
was taken
2 hours extra due to driver who was
Consider using a past participle here: "come".
came
late on that day,
It seems that the possessive pronoun "its" fits better in this context. Please verify.
it
mood
was spoiled
.
Also
, mobile phone was
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used
by driver while driving and top of that,
Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: "drives".
drive
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very
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fast
in the narrow roads which
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make
trip uncomfortable. To
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make
it
Use only "worse" (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
more worse
, as you know that winter season is running,
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but
hotels AC could not
The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: "turn"
turned
switch off
besides
this, blanket was not provided by hotel management due to this I caught from fever
next
day and unable to enjoy remaining trip.

What is more
, we went restaurant in order to take lunch
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but
it did not
The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: "offer"
offered
by the restaurant when we asked about it from manger, he
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told
us they do not include the charges of lunch
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so
that if we want to take lunch, we would
The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: "have"
had
to pay extra for it. apart from this, staff members was not co-operative with clients, they were argumentative by nature

I feel, I
am entitled
to a full refund and a written apology for the misinformation contained in your advertisement. I hope to hear from you regarding this matter as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible.

Yours
faithfully
,

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xyz

IELTS letter Write a letter to a travel agent expressing your dissatisfaction with their facilities due to a problem you had on a holiday (478899)

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
248 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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