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Skd, [01.04.21 13:19] [Forwarded from Skd] Dear Sir/Madam, I would like some information about the Tertiary Preparation Certificate. If possible I would like to enroll in this course as a part-time student in 1992. I left school eight years ago after completing the 1ISC. Since then I have worked as a sales assistant in both Grace Bros and David Jones. From the beginning of this year I have been in charge of the Children's Wear Department in Grace Bros, Lily field. However, in order to advance any further in my career into a managerial position, I will need to do some further study, such as a Marketing or Business Course. Because I have not studied for many years, I believe that I should complete the TPC before enrolling in a Business course. Could you please send me the information as soon as possible, and tell me the dates for enrolling in the Tertiary Preparation Certificate. Yours faithfully. Skd, [01.04.21 13:21] [Forwarded from Skd] Write a letter to the Information Officer a

Skd, [01. 04. 21 13: 19] [Forwarded from Skd] Dear Sir/Madam, I would like some information about the Tertiary Preparation Certificate. If possible I would like to enroll in this course as a part-time student in 1992. I left school eight years ago after completing the 1ISC. Since then I have worked as a sales assistant in both Grace Bros and David Jones. From the beginning of this year I have been in charge of the Children's Wear Department in Grace Bros, Lily field. However, in order to advance any further in my career into a managerial position, I will need to do some further study, such as a Marketing or Business Course. Because I have not studied for many years, I believe that I should complete the TPC before enrolling in a Business course. Could you please send me the information as soon as possible, and tell me the dates for enrolling in the Tertiary Preparation Certificate. Yours faithfully. Skd, [01. 04. 21 13: 21] [Forwarded from Skd] Write a letter to the Information Officer a Jpr6
Dear Sir/Madam, I would like some information about the Tertiary Preparation Certificate. If possible I would like to enroll in this course as a part-time student in 1992. I left school eight years ago after completing the 1ISC. Since then I have worked as a sales assistant in both Grace Bros and David Jones. From the beginning of this year I have been in charge of the Children's Wear Department in Grace Bros, Lily field. However, in order to advance any further in my career into a managerial position, I will need to do some further study, such as a Marketing or Business Course. Because I have not studied for many years, I believe that I should complete the TPC before enrolling in a Business course. Could you please send me the information as soon as possible, and tell me the dates for enrolling in the Tertiary Preparation Certificate. Yours faithfully.
Dear Sir/Madam,

I would like
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information about the Tertiary Preparation Certificate. If possible I would like to enroll in this course as a part-time student in 1992.

I
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school eight years ago after completing the 1ISC. Since
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have worked as a sales assistant in both Grace Bros and David Jones. From the beginning of this year I have been in charge of the Children's Wear Department in Grace Bros, Lily field.

However
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further
in my career into a managerial position, I will need to do
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study, such as a Marketing or Business Course.
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I have not studied for
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years, I believe that I should complete the TPC
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enrolling in a Business course.

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Yours
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IELTS letter Skd, [01. 04. 21 13: 19] [Forwarded from Skd] Dear Sir/Madam, I would like some information about the Tertiary Preparation Certificate. If possible I would like to enroll in this course as a part-time student in 1992. I left school eight years ago after completing the 1ISC. Since then I have worked as a sales assistant in both Grace Bros and David Jones. From the beginning of this year I have been in charge of the Children's Wear Department in Grace Bros, Lily field. However, in order to advance any further in my career into a managerial position, I will need to do some further study, such as a Marketing or Business Course. Because I have not studied for many years, I believe that I should complete the TPC before enrolling in a Business course. Could you please send me the information as soon as possible, and tell me the dates for enrolling in the Tertiary Preparation Certificate. Yours faithfully. Skd, [01. 04. 21 13: 21] [Forwarded from Skd] Write a letter to the Information Officer a

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  • Skd, [01.04.21 13:19] [Forwarded from Skd] Dear Sir/Madam, I would like some information about the Tertiary Preparation Certificate. If possible I would like to enroll in this course as a part-time student in 1992. I left school eight years ago after completing the 1ISC. Since then I have worked as a sales assistant in both Grace Bros and David Jones. From the beginning of this year I have been in charge of the Children's Wear Department in Grace Bros, Lily field. However, in order to advance any further in my career into a managerial position, I will need to do some further study, such as a Marketing or Business Course. Because I have not studied for many years, I believe that I should complete the TPC before enrolling in a Business course. Could you please send me the information as soon as possible, and tell me the dates for enrolling in the Tertiary Preparation Certificate. Yours faithfully. Skd, [01.04.21 13:21] [Forwarded from Skd] Write a letter to the Information Officer a