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Write a letter to a speaking English friend living abroad to inform her that you will be married and invite her. With whom Will you be married? Give her the schedule of the ceremony. Why will she find this visit beneficial? ll

Write a letter to a speaking English friend living abroad to inform her that you will be married and invite her. With whom Will you be married? Give her the schedule of the ceremony. Why will she find this visit beneficial? ll NELW
Dear sarah, Hope I find you in a radiant health. I'm getting married and I'm writing to formally invite you to my wedding ceremony which will take place in Sofitel hotel in Algiers on May, 15th. My fiance, Ahmed Salam, is an architect working at housing and town - planning Ministry. We met for the first time in a seminar and had an instant liking for each other. He approached my family three months after our first meeting. As I know you, you have always been keen on finding out everything related to maghrebian marriage rituals and customs. So, this ceremony will take three days. On 13th, we have the ring ceremony within we will cutout a prestigious - six tier cake after the "Fatiha" recitation through which the marriage is religiously formalized. On 14th, we will receive my step family for dinner and henna laying ceremony, within my step mother will lay a small amount of henna on my two hands' palms before covering them with a cotton under women songs, applauses and youyoux. On 15th, I will leave my parents' home to the hotel where the wedding ceremony will be celebrated. I will show-off all my sumptious outfits representing various Algerian regions. In the evening, I will move definitely to my husband's home. I believe that you will be pleasured to attend my wedding ceremony. Besides, it will be a crucial opportunity for you to enrich your presentation about maghebian traditions by exploring them by yourself rather than hearing about on the media or on the internet. After I leave, you are welcome to spend some time with my family. My little sister will show you some breath-taking spots in Algiers. Hoping to see you in the wedding! Yours with love Selma
Dear
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sarah
,

Hope I find you in a radiant health. I'm getting married and I'm writing to
formally
invite you to my wedding
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ceremony
which will take place in
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Sofitel
hotel in Algiers on May, 15th.

My
'fiance' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "fiancé"
fiance
, Ahmed
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Salam
, is an architect working at housing and town
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
-
planning Ministry. We met for the
first
time in a seminar and had an instant liking for each other. He approached my family three months after our
first
meeting.

As I know you, you have always been keen on finding out everything related to
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maghrebian
marriage rituals and customs.

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So
, this
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ceremony
will take three days. On 13th, we have the ring
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ceremony
within we
The word 'cutout' is a noun or an adjective. A verb or adverb is missing or misspelled here, or maybe a comma is missing.
will cutout
a prestigious
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-
six tier cake after the
Use a smart opening quote here: "“".
"
Fatiha
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"
recitation through which the marriage is
religiously
formalized. On 14th, we will receive my step family for dinner and henna laying
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ceremony
, within my step mother will lay a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
amount of henna on my two hands' palms
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
covering them with a cotton under women songs,
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applauses
and
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youyoux
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
On
15th, I will
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leave
my parents' home to the hotel where the wedding
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ceremony
will
be celebrated
. I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
-off all my
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sumptious
outfits representing various Algerian regions. In the evening, I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
definitely to my husband's home.

I believe that you will
be pleasured
to attend my wedding
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ceremony
.
Besides
, it will be a crucial opportunity for you to enrich your presentation about
Possible spelling mistake found.
maghebian
traditions by exploring them by yourself
rather
than hearing about on the media or on the internet.

After I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
, you are welcome to spend
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
time with my family. My
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
sister will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
breath-taking spots in Algiers.

Hoping to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
you in the wedding!

Yours with
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love


Selma
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IELTS letter Write a letter to a speaking English friend living abroad to inform her that you will be married and invite her. With whom Will you be married? Give her the schedule of the ceremony. Why will she find this visit beneficial? ll

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9 paragraphs
293 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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