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Write a letter to a manager to ask them to give information about the product you want to buy.       What item you need?        Why do you need it?

Write a letter to a manager to ask them to give information about the product you want to buy. What item you need? Why do you need it? 3a11w
Dear the manager of the shop, I am writing to enquire about purchasing a running truck from your chain store. Not long ago, a friend of mine recommended your shop while I was looking for the running track for myself. I believe that your chain of stores is the best place where manifold household appliances are sold. Besides, I bought a vacuum cleaner two years ago and it is working perfectly. My reason for wanting to acquire a running track is because I have been attending fitness courses since last month. I do hope that such kind of appliance will be extra helpful for me to keep fit. I would be grateful if you could recommend me which brand and model I should purchase and why. Could you inform me what you charge for the product and about installation conditions? I will enclose my contact details below. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully Elly Windsor.
Dear the manager of the shop,

I am writing to
enquire
about purchasing a running truck from your chain store.

Not long ago, a friend of mine recommended your shop while I was looking for the running
track
for myself. I believe that your chain of stores is the best place where manifold household appliances
are sold
.
Besides
, I
bought
a vacuum cleaner two years ago and it is working
perfectly
.

My reason for wanting to acquire a running
track
is
because
I have been attending fitness courses since last month. I do hope that such kind of appliance will be extra helpful for me to
keep
fit.

I would be grateful if you could recommend me which brand and model I should
purchase
and why. Could you inform me what you charge for the product and about installation conditions?

I will enclose my contact
details
below. I look forward to hearing from you
soon
.

Yours
faithfully
Elly
Windsor.
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IELTS letter Write a letter to a manager to ask them to give information about the product you want to buy. What item you need? Why do you need it?

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
159 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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