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Apply for a job in Australia. Explain why you want this job and how you are a suitable candidate

Apply for a job in Australia. Explain why you want this job and how you are a suitable candidate ox9Pb
I am writing to you with an interest in applying for the position you advertised for in an Australian Magazine. Currently, I am employed as a child-care professional and live with a family whilst taking care of their four-year-old boy, Tim. Tim is a great kid and I thoroughly enjoy the time I have spent with my employers. However, they are moving out from Singapore to London, and I am in search of a new employment opportunity. It is in this context that I came across your advertisement and the prospect of moving to Australia, excites me. I feel confident that I will be a suitable candidate to live with your family and take care of your six-year-old child as I am a trained childcare professional and have over two years of experience living with three different families and taking care of six children, aged 2-10 years. Prior to taking care of children, I used to work as a teacher’s aide primarily working with kindergarten children. I am also a qualified first-aid administration and have often found this skill to be handy when caring for children. I am calm and patient with children and can take care of them well. If you wish so, I can get you references from all three of my previous employers. Although I have not visited Australia, I foresee a smooth transition from Singapore, where I have been living for the last 10 years. I am an avid birdwatcher and often spend my free time visiting nature reserves and observing birds and other wildlife. The spending time in the Australian outback would be a great opportunity for me to observe the fauna and flora on the big continent. I am particularly interested in visiting the coastal forests and the deserts in search of spiders. I hope you will consider my application. I look forward to hearing from you about scheduling my interview for this position. Please do not hesitate to contact me either on my handphone or my email for any further queries. In anticipation of a favourable response, Yours sincerely, Seshadri.
I am writing to you with an interest in applying for the position you advertised for in an Australian Magazine.
Currently
, I
am employed
as a child-care professional and
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live
with a family whilst taking
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care
of their four-year-
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old
boy, Tim. Tim is a great kid and I
thoroughly
enjoy the time I have spent with my employers.
However
, they are moving out from Singapore to London, and I am in search of a new employment opportunity. It is in this context that I came across your advertisement and the prospect of moving to Australia, excites me.

I feel confident that I will be a suitable candidate to
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live
with your family and take
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care
of your six-year-
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old
child as I am a trained childcare professional and have over two years of experience living with three
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different
families and taking
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care
of six
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children
, aged 2-10 years. Prior to taking
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care
of
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children
, I
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used
to work as a teacher’s aide
primarily
working with kindergarten
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children
. I am
also
a qualified
first
-aid administration and have
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often
found this
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skill
to be handy when caring for
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children
. I am calm and patient with
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children
and can take
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care
of them well. If you wish
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so
, I can
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get
you references from all three of my previous employers.

Although I have not visited Australia, I foresee a smooth transition from Singapore, where I have been living for the last 10 years. I am an avid birdwatcher and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
spend my free time visiting nature reserves and observing birds and other wildlife. The spending time in the Australian outback would be a great opportunity for me to observe the fauna and flora on the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
continent. I am
particularly
interested in visiting the coastal forests and the deserts in search of spiders.

I hope you will consider my application.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
look forward to hearing from you about scheduling my interview for this position.
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Please
do not hesitate to contact me either on my
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handphone
or my email for any
further
queries.

In anticipation of a
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favourable
response,

Yours
sincerely
,

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Seshadri
.
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IELTS letter Apply for a job in Australia. Explain why you want this job and how you are a suitable candidate

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
347 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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