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Write a letter to a friend,asking for her advice

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Dear Carrie, I'm writing to you in such a depressing mood that I've never been through before. My parents don't allow me to go on our holiday as we planed. They wanted me to stay home and study. Let's figure down how to convince them to let me go on the trip, and I need your advice. The only problem here is that they kept saying that I need extra preparation even though I'm already well-prepared for it. I just can't stand it when thinking that we have to cancel our dream trip to Dalat - the thing that we have always talk about.
Dear Carrie,

I'm writing to you in such a depressing mood that I've never been through
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before
. My parents don't
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allow
me to go on our holiday as we planed. They wanted me to stay home and study.
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Let
's figure down how to convince them to
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let
me go on the trip, and I need your advice.

The
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only
problem here is that they
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kept
saying that I need extra preparation
even though
I'm already well-prepared for it.

I
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just
can't stand it when thinking that we
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have to
cancel our dream trip to
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Dalat
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-
the thing that we have always
Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: "talked".
talk
about.
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IELTS letter Write a letter to a friend, asking for her advice

Letter
  American English
4 paragraphs
104 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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