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Write a letter to a course manager to enroll on the course.

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Dear Sir, I am writing for a place on the History MA cours which commences this September at Winston University. I am 25 years old and I have complated a history degree at Macbriney Univerdity where I received the first class hours. Prior to this, I obtained four A levels in History, English, Maths, and Geography. Since the completion of my BA degree I have spent one year working as assisstant historian. This work was very enjoyable. Moreover, I have learned the language very well and I can say I handle it as a specialist and I am in anxious now to specialize by gaining further qualifications before embarking on my chosen career in this field. I enclosed every details of my education and qualifications and address to contact with me. I hope, you will condider me as a suitable candidate for this entry. I am looking forward to hearing from you as soon as possible. Yourth faithfully.
Dear Sir,

I am writing for a place on the History MA
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cours
which commences this September at Winston University.

I am 25 years
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old
and I have
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complated
a history degree at
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Macbriney
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Univerdity
where I received the
first
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class
hours. Prior to this, I obtained four
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A levels
in History, English,
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Maths
, and Geography.

“Since” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Since
the completion of my BA degree I have spent one year working as
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assisstant
historian. This work was
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very
enjoyable.
Moreover
, I have learned the language
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very
well and I can say I handle it as a
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
specialist and
I am in anxious
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now
to specialize by gaining
further
qualifications
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before
embarking on my chosen career in this field.

I enclosed every
The noun should be probably in the singular form: "detail"?
details
of my education and qualifications and address to contact with me.

I hope, you will
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condider
me as a suitable candidate for this entry.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am looking forward to hearing from you as
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soon
as possible.

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Yourth
faithfully
.

IELTS letter Write a letter to a course manager to enroll on the course.

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
158 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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