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Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family?

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Hi, I strongly disgree with this by sending parents to the old age home. Because when we are kids father and mother dosen't think about to send us out of the house. They used to enjoy the life with childrens and they never treated us a problem for them even when they faced up's and down in their life. But many people thinks that the world became very fast and earning money itself a biggest challenge in their life. So they decided to take their parents to the old age home to care more on them since they thought they could not spend much time with them. I conclude that, Atleast they could spend money to take care of old people if not spend time with them. They should treat this as their duty. It will make old people spend some time happy with others. Thanks, Bharath
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Thanks,

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Bharath
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IELTS letter Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family?

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