Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

What kind of person you want to be and what kind of person you are now?

What kind of person you want to be and what kind of person you are now? Yk38K
Hello my Name is Tina. Today, I will tell you about the kind of person I want to be in the future and the person I am now. I’m in the 6th grade. I study at Luong The Vinh secondary school. In this school, I study new lessons and I like these lessons! I have many new friends and teachers here; they are kind to me and help me when I need. My school has many clubs such as: English, Math, Sports, Music, …. I love many clubs very much. In the future, I want to study Le Quy Don high school. I want to get ielts 8. 5 and I can study abroad to learn more new knowledge. I want to be a scientist. I want invent many modern things to more develop word. I will invent robots to help people works easily. I want to be a useful person to society.
Hello my Name is Tina.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Today
, I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
you about the kind of person I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
want
to be in the future and the person I am
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
.

I’m in the 6th grade. I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
at
Possible spelling mistake found.
Luong
The
Possible spelling mistake found.
Vinh
secondary
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
. In this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
, I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
new lessons and I like these lessons! I have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
new friends and teachers here; they are kind to me and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me when I need. My
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
clubs such as: English, Math, Sports, Music, …. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
clubs
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
much.

In the future, I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
want
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
Le
Possible spelling mistake found.
Quy
Don high
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
. I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
want
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
Possible spelling mistake found.
ielts
8. 5 and I can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
abroad to learn more new knowledge. I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
want
to be a scientist. I
Probably a preposition is missing after 'want'.
want invent
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
modern things to more develop word.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
will invent robots to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
If 'people' is plural here, don't use the third-person singular verb.
works
easily
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
want
to be a useful person to society.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS letter What kind of person you want to be and what kind of person you are now?

Letter
  American English
3 paragraphs
153 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts
  • 5.5band
    Ask about part time job, a friend live there.
    Dear Zarin, Hope you are going well. With joy I like to inform you that I got a Chance to Study in Canada. My subject is Information and Technology, and I also got an offer of a scholarship. As you know it is a demanding subject, in spite of getting a scholarship I need to pay for my course. I am pl...
  • 5.5band
    write a letter to your friend as she is going to vacation on this summer, recommend her a place
    Dear bella, i hope you are doing great. I heard that you got many day off from the company in summer and planning to go the vacation. I have one place to recommend it to you, its in the southern of Thailand called Krabi, its a small province that have a beautiful beaches and the sea is crystal clear...
  • 6.5band
    Warning regardung the credit suspension
    Sub: Warning regarding the credit suspension Dear Mr. Jonathan, We want to inform you that your account has been canceled temporarily as you have delayed your payments. You have been very late in paying installments to the company during the last three months. We reviewed your file and understood ...
  • 5.5band
    Hungarian Government Scholarship Motivation Letter
    WILLY NZULU KISOI, willynzulu@gmail. com, P. O. BOX 30178-00100, NAIROBI, KENYA. 1ST DECEMBER, 2021. HUNGARIAN HIGHER EDUCATION INSTITUTION, 1077 BUDAPEST, KETHLY ANNA TÉR 1, BUDAPEST, HUNGARY. RESPECTED SIR/MADAM, RE: APPLICATION FOR THE STIPENDIUM HUNGARICUM SCHOLARSHIP 2022/2023 ACADEM...
  • 5.5band
    You`ve recently celebrated a significant birthday. Write a letter to a friend expressing how you feel about being this age. What`s good and bad about it?
    Dear JudyHow are you doing? Thanks for the last letter and forgive me this so late response. I have been incredibly busy for last month, as I was preparing and planning my 20th birthday party. It took place in my and parent`s house last Saturday and over fifth people came to join the party. Honestly...
  • 6band
    I am writing to express my complaint
    Dear Sir manager On October 8, 2026, 1 purchased a fridge (Sodina MB77-304) from your company. A three weeks ago I found that while working it turned to only one side. I got a refrigerator from you. When I brought it home, it is freezer did not freeze my things well. The technicians at your factory...