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we have an opening for a qualified sales manager who can lead the worldwide sales team execute strategies for increasing business opportunities while expanding the customer e. The sales manager of the worldwide sales team will have primary responsibility for E US. and overseas operations, focusing mainly on Asia. Thank you.

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Dear Jane Strong, I’m writing in respond to your email dated June 22 regarding a vacant position. I’m extremely happy to receive this email. Thank you for give me a chance to express what I have about an opening for a qualified sales manager. Firstly, I have more than five years in sale management at home and abroad. Secondly, I have a good communication skill and I am quite confident because I can attract others through my first meeting. Finally, I wonder if you can give me an opportunity to prove this. Moreover, if you don’t believe my words, here are the pictures was attached above to prove what I did. Sincerely, My.
Dear Jane Strong,

I’m writing in respond to your email dated June 22 regarding a vacant position. I’m
extremely
happy to receive this email. Thank you for give me a chance to express what I have about an opening for a qualified sales manager.
Firstly
, I have more than five years in sale management at home and abroad.
Secondly
, I have a
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good
communication
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
skill and
I am quite confident
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because
I can attract others through my
first
meeting.
Finally
, I wonder if you can give me an opportunity to prove this.
Moreover
, if you don’t believe my words, here are the pictures
was attached
above to prove what I did.

Sincerely
,

My.
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IELTS letter we have an opening for a qualified sales manager who can lead the worldwide sales team execute strategies for increasing business opportunities while expanding the customer e. The sales manager of the worldwide sales team will have primary responsibility for E US. and overseas operations, focusing mainly on Asia. Thank you.

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4 paragraphs
113 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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