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Want to buy some electronic goods from nearby shop

Want to buy some electronic goods from nearby shop NBMd

Dear Sir, This letter is regard to enquire about some electronic goods which I needed. Your shop was recommended by my acquaintance. I have just rented an unfurnished apartment in the city center and your shop is the nearest one from my flat. I want to give it new-look to my home by adding some daily needed equipment. Well, I need a refrigerator, washing machine, vacuum cleaner, TV and sound box. Could you please mail me the price list of all these goods? I also want to buy sofa, bed and a book shelve for my dining room. Please let me known if all these items are available in your shop, if it is then how long can you hold these things for me and if not so can you able to order it for me. I also request you to please consider me for some discount as I am buying it in bulk. Looking forward to hearing. Yours Sincerely,

Dear Sir,

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Looking forward to hearing.

Yours Sincerely
, 

IELTS letter Want to buy some electronic goods from nearby shop

Letter

American English

6 paragraphs

160 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.0

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.5

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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