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You play a team sport with some friends. Last week a member of the team had an accident and wasn't able to play with you at the weekend. You decide to write to him in hospital, telling him about the match. Write a letter to your friend.

You play a team sport with some friends. Last week a member of the team had an accident and wasn't able to play with you at the weekend. You decide to write to him in hospital, telling him about the match. Write a letter to your friend. qqRr
Dear Frank, I was so sorry to hear about your accident! I hope you're feeling a lot better today and that it's not too boring in hospital. The match on Saturday was disappointing. The score was 2 all, probably because you weren't there to score that extra goal! The awful thing was that we were winning until 10 minutes before the end, when suddenly they scored another goal. I was so shocked when I saw the ball hit the back of the net. I think the weather was to blame. It was a really wet day and the pitch was very muddy. By the end of the game you could hardly see the grass and we were sliding around in the mud. Everyone was exhausted. Let us know when you're going home and we'll arrange for someone to bring you to watch the next game. The rest of the team send their regards and we all wish you a speedy recovery. Best wishes, Charlie
Dear Frank,

I was
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sorry to hear about your accident! I hope you're feeling a lot better
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today
and that it's not too boring in hospital.

The match on Saturday was disappointing. The score was 2
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all
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because
you weren't there to score that extra goal!
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The
awful thing was that we were winning until 10 minutes
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before
the
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end
, when
suddenly
they scored another goal. I was
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so
shocked when I
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saw
the ball hit the back of the net.

I
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think
the weather was to blame. It was a
really
wet day and the pitch was
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very
muddy. By the
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end
of the game you could hardly
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see
the
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grass and
we were sliding around in the mud. Everyone
was exhausted
.

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Let
us know when you're going
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home and
we'll arrange for someone to bring you to
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watch
the
next
game. The rest of the team
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send
their
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regards and
we all wish you a speedy recovery.

Best wishes, Charlie

IELTS letter You play a team sport with some friends. Last week a member of the team had an accident and wasn't able to play with you at the weekend. You decide to write to him in hospital, telling him about the match. Write a letter to your friend.

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