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You recently took a part-time job working for a local company. After a few weeks, you realised there were some problems with the job. Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter:   explain why you took the job   describe the problems that you experienced   suggest what could be done about them

You recently took a part-time job working for a local company. After a few weeks, you realised there were some problems with the job. Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter: explain why you took the job describe the problems that you experienced suggest what could be done about them VJE3
Dear sir, I am writing this letter with regard to recent advertisement in local newspaper for the post of Accountant Manager on fulltime basis in your company. I am Naksha Patel from Anand working as accountant in Apollo Pharmacy Ltd. on part time basis. I would like to apply for the same post showed in the advertisement. I had an experience of two years in the fields of accountancy which provides me valuable and important knowledge including vast experience which now enhances me towards more confidence to work as a fulltime employee Apart from this recently I have also completed my masters in accountancy so that I can set my career for better future. I feel that I am eligible person for this post because I am now familiar with the company and how I should perform all the tasks given by the company with all my abilities. Moreover, as I have discussed above my masters degree will allow me to apply all the theoretical and practical knowledge which will beneficial for the company. I hope you will consider me as eligible and appropriate person and appoint me for this post. I am optimistic towards this application and looking for a positive and prompt reply. Thanking you. Yours faithfully, Naksha.
Dear sir,

I am writing this letter with regard to recent advertisement in local newspaper for the
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post
of Accountant Manager on
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fulltime
basis in your
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company
.

I am
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Naksha
Patel from Anand working as accountant in Apollo Pharmacy Ltd. on
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part time
basis.
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I
would like to apply for the same
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post
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showed
in the advertisement.

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I
had an experience of two years in the fields of accountancy which provides me valuable and
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important
knowledge including vast experience which
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now
enhances me towards more confidence to work as a
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fulltime
employee

Apart from this recently I have
also
completed my masters in accountancy
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so
that I can set my career for better future.

I feel that I
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am eligible
person for this
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post
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because
I am
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now
familiar with the
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company
and how I should perform all the tasks
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given
by the
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company
with all my abilities.
Moreover
, as I have discussed above my
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masters
degree will
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allow
me to apply all the theoretical and practical knowledge which will beneficial for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.

I hope you will consider me as eligible and appropriate person and appoint me for this
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post
. I am optimistic towards this application and looking for a
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positive
and prompt reply.

Thanking you.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Naksha
.

IELTS letter You recently took a part-time job working for a local company. After a few weeks, you realised there were some problems with the job. Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter: explain why you took the job describe the problems that you experienced suggest what could be done about them

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  American English
10 paragraphs
210 words
5.0
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