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traditional festival in vietnam

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hello everyone! today our group represent you the Hung king festival. Our presentation has 2 parts. We will describe about the details of the festival first, and we will talk about the temples afterwards. First of all, i will be giving you information about Hung king. There are 18 Hung king and they are the fathers whom have been protecting our land through ages. To express our gratitude, we, the future of the country have festival annually at the 3th of March. Secondly, we will show you the cultural temples, some of the famous ones are at Phu Tho, Binh Da, . . etc. At the 3 of March every year, Vietnamese people, wherever they are, they will always be thankful about the dedication of the kings. Some people whose lives abroad will make an altar on that date, the others who live within the country will attend the temples and each of them will stick incense into a bowl so as to respect their “fathers”. on the day, the majority of people usually eat Banh Chung, Banh Tet to celebrate the festival. This is the end of the presentation, please give us your feedbacks for our us to improve.

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