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Dear Nelly I am writing to inquire about Oxford where you are

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Dear Nelly I am writing to inquire about Oxford where you are educating the university. I heard about you have entered into the university from your mother. I was happy for you. I am going to go to Oxford city next week. On Sunday my uncle's sixtyth anniversary. I get wonderful gift to him with my father. My close relatives live in there for a long years. They moved to the town when my uncle was thirty. Consequent, we will celebrate the birthday party and I will stay with them about ten days. I would be grateful if you could come to the party. Could you tell me what kind of places for entertainment there are in Oxford? I hope that you have free time for me and we would spend time enjoyable. I wait to your answer soon. Best wishes Diana Toms.

Dear Nelly


I am writing to inquire about Oxford where you are educating the university.

I heard about you have entered into the university from your mother. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 was happy for you. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 am going to go to Oxford city next
 week. On Sunday my uncle's Possible spelling mistake found.sixthsixtysixtieth
sixtyth
 anniversary. I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 wonderful gift to him with my father.

My close relatives This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reside
live
 in there for a long Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "year"?year
years
. They This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :relocated
moved
 to the town when my uncle was thirty. Consequent, we will celebrate the birthday party and I will stay with them about ten days.

I would be grateful if you could This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :approacharrive
come
 to the party. Could you This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :inform
tell
 me what kind of places for entertainment there are in Oxford? I hope that you have free time for Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).me, and
me and
 we would spend time enjoyable.

I wait to your answer This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:in the near future
soon
.

Best wishes

Diana Toms. 

IELTS letter Dear Nelly I am writing to inquire about Oxford where you are

Letter

American English

7 paragraphs

143 words

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4.0

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

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Lexical Resource: 6.0

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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