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There have been some problems with public transport in your area recently. Write a letter to the manager of the transport company. In your letter: Describe the problems Explain how these problems are affecting the public Suggest some changes that could be made

To Whom It May Concern I am writing this letter to inform you of an issue related with subway system. Yesterday, I was waiting for a train to go to Queen station from Finch station. Yet, while I was standing there, I had noticed that no subway station in this city has platform screen doors to prevent people from committing suicide. I personally think this is an obsolete measure since the number of people who commit suicide in this country is rapidly growing. Last week, when I was heading back to downtown from Finch station, I heard an announcement from train speaker saying that someone attempted to skill him or herself; therefore, trains will be delayed for a few minutes. I think this type of accidents or unsatisfactory services will continuously occur until the doors are installed. Therefore, it would be great if you consider aforementioned door systems at least in the busiest stations in downtown. I assure that this will prevent many people from committing any unfortunate situations. I look forward to hearing from you soon Best regards, Eunmi Park.
To Whom It May Concern

I am writing this letter to inform you of an issue related with subway system.

Yesterday, I was waiting for a train to go to Queen
station
from Finch
station
.
Yet
, while I was standing there, I had noticed that no subway
station
in this city has platform screen doors to
prevent
people
from committing suicide. I
personally
think
this is an obsolete measure since the number of
people
who commit suicide in this country is
rapidly
growing.

Last week, when I was heading back to downtown from Finch
station
, I heard an announcement from train speaker saying that someone attempted to
skill
him or herself;
therefore
, trains will
be delayed
for a few minutes. I
think
this type of accidents or unsatisfactory services will
continuously
occur until the doors
are installed
.

Therefore
, it would be great if you consider aforementioned door systems at least in the busiest
stations
in downtown. I assure that this will
prevent
many
people
from committing any unfortunate situations.

I look forward to hearing from you
soon


Best regards,

Eunmi
Park.
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IELTS letter There have been some problems with public transport in your area recently. Write a letter to the manager of the transport company. In your letter: Describe the problems Explain how these problems are affecting the public Suggest some changes that could be made

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  American English
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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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