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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in connection to the construction of the shopping centre along Mapleton Road in the Tarneit suburb.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in connection to the construction of the shopping centre along Mapleton Road in the Tarneit suburb. I want to express my concerns due to this and want to find some more information regarding the shopping mall. I read about the plans for building a shopping complex in Tarneit’s local newspaper - The Western Times. The news article mentioned that the construction will begin in December this year and it is a massive 30 acre project. I feel concerned about such a huge project being developed in a suburb that has limited public transportation. Most people use cars for travel and if the complex does not have enough parking spaces, this could lead to unwanted street parking causing traffic on roads. I kindly request you to share details of the project in respect to total parking spaces in the plan, any proposals for developing public transport and how the council plans to support the local businesses that might run out once the shopping complex opens up with the big international brands. I thank you for your kind response in advance and look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Hains Will
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing in connection to the construction of the
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shopping
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centre
along Mapleton Road in the
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Tarneit
suburb. I want to express my concerns due to this and want to find
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some
more information regarding the
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shopping
mall.

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I
read about the plans for building a
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shopping
complex in
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Tarneit
’s local newspaper
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-
The Western Times. The news article mentioned that the construction will
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begin
in December this
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year and
it is a massive 30 acre project.

I feel concerned about such a huge project
being developed
in a suburb that has limited public transportation. Most
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people
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use
cars for travel and if the complex does not have
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enough
parking spaces, this could lead to unwanted street parking causing traffic on roads.

I kindly request you to share
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details
of the project in respect to total parking spaces in the plan, any proposals for developing public transport and how the council plans to support the local businesses that might run out once the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
complex opens up with the
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big
international brands.

I thank you for your kind response in advance and look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Hains
Will
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IELTS letter Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in connection to the construction of the shopping centre along Mapleton Road in the Tarneit suburb.

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
196 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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