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The TV set that you have recently bought does not work. You have phoned the service centre, but no action has been taken.

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Dear Sir I am writing you to complaint about your service centre. On June 9, 2020, I purchased a televison in your centre. A few days ago, I found that while working it did not show anything. Moreover, there was lack of a number of constructions in it. My husband was angry with the TV. Before I called to your company, some master have tried to repair that machine but they did not do. Due to the fact that, I have phoned several times to know what have happened to this tool. However, nobody answer me, I tried to connect with your centre. I was completely dissapointed with your shop centre. I would like to change it to other one, which is new. Besides, And your workers should pay attention their work and you ought to compensate me for spending money on masters. I would appreciate it if you do my demands. I hope you will look into the matter and give me an immediate reply. Your faithfully, Hazel Grace.

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centre
. On June 9, 2020, I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquired
purchased
 a Possible spelling mistake found.television
televison
 in your Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.center
centre
. A few days ago, I found that while working it did not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstrateportrayindicatedisplay
show
 anything. Moreover
, there was lack of a number of constructions in it. My husband was angry with the TV. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
Before
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company
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 master have tried to repair that machine This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 they did not do. Due to the fact that, I have phoned several times to know what have happened to this tool. However
, nobody The pronoun 'nobody' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "answers", "answered".answersanswered
answer
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centre
. I was completely Possible spelling mistake found.disappointed
dissapointed
 with your shop Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.center
centre
. I would like to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteradjust
change
 it to other one, which is new. Besides
, And your workers should pay attention their work and you ought to compensate me for spending money on masters. I would appreciate it if you do my demands. I hope you will look into the matter and give me an immediate reply. Did you mean "Yours"? (complimentary close)Yours
Your
faithfully
, Hazel Grace. 

IELTS letter The TV set that you have recently bought does not work. You have phoned the service centre, but no action has been taken.

Letter

American English

1 paragraphs

170 words

5.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 5.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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