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The provided diagram shows the relevant information of one country about export earning of various categories in the year 2015 and 2016.

The provided diagram shows the relevant information of one country about export earning of various categories in the year 2015 and 2016. w1jq
The provided diagram shows the relevant information of one country about export earning of various categories in the year 2015 and 2016. The graph demonstrate the deflection in export earning of Petroleum products, Engineered goods, Gems and jewelry, Agricultural products and Textiles in the period of year 2015 to 2016. It is very much clear that, the export earning has flourish a bit in 2016 as compared to the year 2015 except Gems and jewelry. The export earning rate of Petroleum products is hiked by 3% whereas, earning was 60 billions in 2015 which rose to 63 billions. Considering Engineered goods, their is 8. 5% of rise in earning in the year 2016. In 2015 the total earning of Engineered goods was about 57% which hike to 62%. On the contrary, Gems and jewelry shows the adverse result, their is a decline in export earning by 5. 18% where the earning was nearly 42 billions in the year 2015 which goes down to 40 billions in succeeding year. Keeping the eyes on Agricultural products earning, on the one hand it has been determined as the lowest change in the earning of exports between two years. The change in the value is of only 0. 81% however it moves from 30 billions in 2015 to approximately 30. 05 billions in 2016. On the other hand, Textiles earning has termed as having the highest change in export earning among all other categories. Their is a rise of 15. 24% in earnings which indicates that the earning was 25 billions in the year 2015 which tremendously inclined to 31 billions in the following year.
The provided diagram
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the relevant information of one country about
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export
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earning
of various categories in the
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year
2015 and 2016. The graph
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demonstrate
the deflection in
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export
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earning
of Petroleum
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products
, Engineered
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goods
, Gems and jewelry, Agricultural
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products
and Textiles in the period of
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year
2015 to 2016.

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very
much
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clear
that, the
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export
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earning
has
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flourish
a bit in 2016 as compared to the
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year
2015 except Gems and jewelry. The
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export
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earning
rate of Petroleum
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products
is hiked
by 3% whereas,
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earning
was 60
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billions
in 2015 which rose to 63
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billions
. Considering Engineered
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goods
,
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their
is 8. 5% of rise in
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earning
in the
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year
2016. In 2015 the total
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earning
of Engineered
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goods
was about 57% which hike to 62%.
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, Gems and jewelry
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shows
the adverse result,
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their
is a decline in
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export
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earning
by 5. 18% where the
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was
nearly
42
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billions
in the
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year
2015 which goes down to 40
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billions
in succeeding year.

Keeping the eyes on Agricultural
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products
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earning
, on the one hand it has
been determined
as the lowest
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change
in the
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earning
of
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exports
between two years. The
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change
in the value is of
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only
0. 81%
however
it
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moves
from 30
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billions
in 2015 to approximately 30. 05
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billions
in 2016.
On the other hand
, Textiles
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earning
has termed as having the highest
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in
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export
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earning
among all other categories.
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Their
is a rise of 15. 24% in
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earnings
which indicates that the
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earning
was 25
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billions
in the
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year
2015 which
tremendously
inclined to 31
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billions
in the following
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IELTS letter The provided diagram shows the relevant information of one country about export earning of various categories in the year 2015 and 2016.

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