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A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary/unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary/unpaid work at the museum. Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the unpaid work. In your letter: Explain why you want to do voluntary work at the museum. Describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful. Give details of when you would be available for work

A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary/unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary/unpaid work at the museum. Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the unpaid work. In your letter: Explain why you want to do voluntary work at the museum. Describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful. Give details of when you would be available for work jpW1
Dear Sir/Madam I am writing to express my interesting to work at the museum as part-time employee. I am fresh graduated form Faculty of History Helwan University. I have a dream from my childhood to work at museum as it part from my studies. I have many information about the history so i can work as a tour guide. Moreover, i can work at financial department for my previous diploma Business Management. I have the ability to work under pressure. I had been training as a tour guide, so i have the experience of this job. Although, I can deal with French and Dutch customer as a native speaker. I am a hard worker not an idle one. In addition i can work over time and no fix time as i do not have any responsibility. I will move up the world at this work. I hope you consider my application and allow me to work with your prestigious museum. Yours Faithfully, John Adel
Dear Sir/Madam

I am writing to express my interesting to
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work
at the museum as part-time employee. I am fresh graduated form Faculty of History
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Helwan
University.

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I
have a dream from my childhood to
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work
at museum as
Do not use a noun immediately after the pronoun 'it'. Use a verb or an adverb, or possibly some other part of speech.
it part
from my studies.
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I
have
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many information
about the history
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so
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i
can
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work
as a tour guide.
Moreover
,
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i
can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
at financial department for my previous diploma Business Management. I have the ability to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
under pressure. I had been training as a tour guide,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
have the experience of this job. Although, I can deal with French and Dutch customer as a native speaker. I am a
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hard
worker not an idle one. In
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addition
Did you mean "I"?
i
can
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work
over time and no
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fix
time as
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
do not have any responsibility. I will
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move
up the world at this work.

I hope you consider my application and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
me to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
with your prestigious museum.

Yours
Faithfully
, John Adel

IELTS letter A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary/unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary/unpaid work at the museum. Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the unpaid work. In your letter: Explain why you want to do voluntary work at the museum. Describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful. Give details of when you would be available for work

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