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The following letter is from a group of Linford College alumni to the chair of the artdepartment at the college.“In a recent survey of college graduates, 90 percent agreed that participating in aninternship increased their chances of finding a job after

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The argument presented here is written by a group of Linford College Alumni to the chair of the Arts department; they state that the college should require all art students to complete an internship with a company called Skyway Designs before graduation. They propound that this company is the best in the area and that according to a survey, students who complete an internship while in college will have better chances of finding a job after graduation. The authors have good intentions which are to increase the success of graduates in finding jobs, but their argument is extremely flawed. The conclusion reached by the authors is not reasonable or reliable due to the use of questionable assumptions, vaguely defined terms and a lack of evidence to support each claim made in their arguemnt. To begin, the group of Alumni who wrote this letter did not give information as to who they are. This information is important to know, because they are making many claims that require professional art knowledge to back it up. If the authors are all computer technology graduates, how are they supposed to know which art internships will be best for the students? additionally another question that the arguers need to answer, is what is their intention with recommending this company? Do these alumni work for Skyway Designs, and therefore want students to intern there to decrease the amount of paid staff they have? If the authors answer these questions and define who they are and what their intentions are in recommending this company, their argument will appear more sound and reliable than it currently does. In addition to defining who the authors are, the argument needs to include more information regarding the surveys thar are used. In the first line fo the argument the authors state that there was a recent survey completed of college graduates and then states that 90% agreed that internships helped them get jobs. In order for the argument to be strong, the authors need to answer these questions: how many students were interviewed, from which schools were they from as they could be national and international, what kind of questions were asked on the survey and was the sample representative? Without such answers, the survey cannot be used successfully as proof in their argument. Additionally, when the authors state that only 40% of the graduating arts students did an internship they should state how they got that percentage. For example what if they only asked 5 out of 200 students? If so, that would again not be a valid statement to make in the argument. If the authors completed a suvey that was representative of students in the college's city and had a large enough sample size, their argument would be stronger. In addition to the use of vague terms and invalid surveys, the authors propound that Skyway Designs offers internships in all of their departments and therefore " every student is sure to find work there. " In order for this claim to be reliable, the authors need to address which departments are present in the company. For example, what if a student is a sculpting major or video game arts design? How is the reader supposed to know that every student will find an internship if there is no explanation of the departments in the company. If the authors provide this list then they can successfully state that " every student" can find an internship, although in reality, this is not very possible as there are most likely more graduate specialties than this company has in departments. Finally, the authors contend that Skyway Designs is one of the best design businesses in the area because " over 80% in Linford city have used their services. " In order for this statement to be a valid argument, the authors need to answer an array of questions including: are there other design agencies in the area? What are the prices of this business compared to those in the area? For example, what if businesses are only using Skyway Designs because they are the cheapest option or because they are the only option? In conclusion, the authors are recommending that the Arts department makes it mandatory for students to do an internship at Skyway Designs in an attempt to help students find jobs easier after graduation. Their argument is not valid due to the use of vague terms, questionable assumptions and a profound lack of evidence. In order to have a reliable argument, the authors should conduct surveys that are representative in size and population, define terms that are vague and provide the reader with more reliable evidence about the company and the city's use of the company. Answering such questions will provide the reader with a reliable argument.

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