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thank you Jams for looking after my house.

thank you Jams for looking after my house. R3QG

Dear James. First of all i would like to thank you for accepting my request to look after my house and my pets while i am away. I will be away for maybe one month, maybe more. So you can contact me on 0114770 while i am in Amsterdam. Please James pay the gas and electricity bills when needed and i will refund you. The dog has eat three times a day and has to be taken to the clinic when needed also has to be taken for a walk everyday. The plant has to be watered every two days and you should spray the pesticides every weekThe rent also has to be paid every month to the landlord. Finally, I would like to thank you again and it is kind of you. My regard Mohammed

Dear James. This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".First
First of all
Did you mean "I"?I
i
 would like to thank you for accepting my request to look after my This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :residence
house
 and my pets while Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.I
i
 am away. I will be away for maybe one month, maybe more. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
So
 you can contact me on 0114770 while Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.I
i
 am in Amsterdam. When a person is directly addressed, a comma should set off the name: "Please, James"?Please, James
Please James
 pay the gas and electricity bills when needed and Did you mean "I"?I
i
 will refund you. The dog has Use past participle here: "eaten".eaten
eat
 three times a day and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:oughts to
has to
be taken
 to the clinic when needed also
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:oughts to
has to
be taken
 for a walk 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean "every day"?every day
everyday
. The plant This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:oughts to
has to
be watered
 every two days and you should spray the pesticides every Possible spelling mistake found.seethewreatheteethe
weekThe
 rent also
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:oughts to
has to
be paid
 every month to the landlord. Finally
, I would like to thank you again and it is kind of you. My regard Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraphMohammed.Mohammed!Mohammed?Mohammed:Mohammed,Mohammed;
Mohammed

IELTS letter thank you Jams for looking after my house.

Letter

American English

1 paragraphs

135 words

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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 5.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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