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Task - I You recently transferred money into your bank account through online banking but the money was not credited to your account. Write a letter to your bank manager. In your letter, introduce yourself describe the situation tell what you want him to do

Dear Sir, Good Day! I'm writing to inquire about my balance status in my bank account and request for your help to sort the below stated issue. On 20th January 2021, I used the online banking option to transfer AED 10, 000 into my bank account. I was expecting it to appear on my bank statement within 24 hours. However, upon checking my account the next day, I was astonished to see that the subject amount is not credited in my account. I assumed that it might not be appearing on my online bank statement, but it must have been credited into the account. Therefore, I called the bank helpline and explained them the whole situation. They informed me that their system is not showing any such transaction. This news is extremely disturbing. I would be very grateful if you can look into your system and please trace down the transacted amount. I'm waiting for your prompt reply on above. Best Regards! Sana Murad
Dear Sir,

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Day!

I'm writing to inquire about my balance status in my
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bank
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account
and request for your
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help
to sort the below stated issue.

On 20th January 2021, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
the online banking option to transfer AED 10, 000 into my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bank
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
account
. I was expecting it to appear on my
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bank
statement within 24 hours.
However
, upon checking my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
account
the
next
day, I
was astonished
to
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see
that the subject amount is not credited in my
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account
. I assumed that it might not be appearing on my online
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bank
statement,
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but
it
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must
have
been credited
into the
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account
.
Therefore
, I called the
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bank
helpline and
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explained
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them
the whole situation. They informed me that their system is not showing any such transaction. This news is
extremely
disturbing.

I would be
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very
grateful if you can look into your system and
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please
trace down the transacted amount.

I'm waiting for your prompt reply on above.

Best Regards!

Sana
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Murad

IELTS letter Task - I You recently transferred money into your bank account through online banking but the money was not credited to your account. Write a letter to your bank manager. In your letter, introduce yourself describe the situation tell what you want him to do

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
163 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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