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It was the last Sunday that my mom and I went to some shop to buy a new mobile for my grandma. We went to many stores but did not find any which meet my grandmother's demand: a small phone(Nokia) which a big keyboard, what we found is just some small keyboard phone. Until we went to the third store, we finally saw the difference. It looked like an old Nokia but bigger and with a big keyboard, at least that is what we thought. We bought it and gave it to my grandma. Sadly, although it was easy to see with me and my mom, my grandmother doesn't see the keyboard well. Firstly, we think the reason was the color. So we go to the shop and change whether it could be seen better but it didn't work. For that reason and also for the carelessness, in the end, we buy another phone for my grandma which she could see the keyboard clear and it was found on the fourth floor. Wish I had gone to the fourth shop before buying anything QAQ. Anyway, every cloud has a silver lining. Although my mother loss more money than expected, now I have a new mobile phone: my mother gave remain phone as me a gift to become a high school student. I think you will confuse why I am so excited about this phone. Simple, because it has Youtube, Facebook, Google, and a camera on that phone which is really unbelievable to me.
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some
shop to
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buy
a new mobile for my grandma. We went to
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many
stores
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but
did not find any which
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meet
my grandmother's demand: a
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small
phone(Nokia) which a
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big
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keyboard
, what we found is
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just
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some
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small
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keyboard
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phone
. Until we went to the third store, we
finally
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saw
the difference. It looked like an
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old
Nokia
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but
bigger and with a
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big
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keyboard
, at least
that is
what we
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thought
. We
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bought
it and gave it to my grandma.
Sadly
, although it was easy to
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see
with me and my mom, my grandmother doesn't
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see
the
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keyboard
well.
Firstly
, we
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the reason was the color.
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So
we go to the shop and
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change
whether it could be
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seen
better
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but
it didn't work. For that reason and
also
for the carelessness, in the
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end
, we
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buy
another
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phone
for my grandma which she could
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the
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keyboard
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clear
and it
was found
on the fourth floor. Wish I had gone to the fourth shop
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before
buying anything
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QAQ
. Anyway, every cloud has a silver lining. Although my mother loss more money than
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expected
,
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now
I have a new mobile
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phone
: my mother gave remain
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phone
as me a gift to become a high school student. I
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think
you will confuse why I am
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so
excited about this
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phone
. Simple,
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because
it has
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Youtube
, Facebook, Google, and a camera on that
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which is
really
unbelievable to me.
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IELTS letter Some of your random thoughts

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1 paragraphs
253 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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