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Room sharing with a college friend ,

Room sharing with a college friend, 6lqlK

Dear Sir, Requesting accommodation in a different place, As you may aware that I am sharing my room with another student who is in the same college. I would like to inform you that I am not happy to share my room with him due to many reasons. My room mate is inviting his friends to the room and start parties sometimes parties will be end next day early in the morning, they wash movies and start playing games, sometimes without my permission they used my personal items as well, In this circumstances it is very hard for me to concentrate for my studies, I am looking for a place where that I do my studies peacefully, I would really appreciate if you can provide a room that only I can use and where it is not much notice, Thank you for your understanding, for any clarification please do not hesitate to contact me or send me a message that I can see you, Thank you Yours truly N C Weerasuriya

Dear Sir,

Requesting accommodation in a This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
different
 place,

“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
 you may aware that I am sharing my You use this word too often, consider replacing it withplacearea
room
 with another student who is in the same college. I would like to inform you that I am not happy to share my You use this word too often, consider replacing it withplacearea
room
 with him due to This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 reasons.

My This expression is normally spelled as one or with hyphen.room-materoommate
room mate
 is inviting his friends to the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withplacearea
room
 and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiate
start
 parties This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :in some instances
sometimes
 parties will be Consider using a past participle here: "ended".ended
end
next
 day early in the morning, they wash movies and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiate
start
 playing games, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :in some instances
sometimes
 without my permission they This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploited
used
 my personal items as well
,

In Did you mean "these"?these
this
 circumstances it is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :arduous
hard
 for me to concentrate for my studies, I am looking for a place where that I do my studies peacefully
, I would really
 appreciate if you can provide a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withplacearea
room
 that This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 I can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
 and where it is not much notice,

Thank you for your understanding, for any clarification This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :satisfy
please
 do not hesitate to contact me or This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :transmit
send
 me a message that I can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witness
see
 you,

Thank you

Yours truly


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Weerasuriya