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A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary unpaid work at the museum Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary /unpaid work. In your letter Explain why you want to do voluntary /unpaid work at the museum Describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful Give details of when you would be available for work.

Dear Sir/Madam, I hope you are in good condition, as I want to know about that kingdom museum is having exhibition for local and foreign travelers since 4 days and you are looking for volunteers. It will be a great pleasure, if you hire me as a volunteer because I am free at home because my examination had been finished and I have to utilize my expertise in good place, so I decided to join as volunteers in the museum as volunteer. Fortunately, I was previously very much engage in seminar and symposia in university as well as my duty was to perform as a volunteer. I had a quality and good experience to handle and tackle huge group of people. I can easily guide the placing and ways of going to different areas as I visited the museum many time because my mother was working there as a cashier in the ticket house. It is to inform you that I will be available in morning from next week because in evening I had to look after the house core activities. Kingdom museum is very near to mu home, I will do my best to reach on time, 15 minutes earlier before its opening to manage the responsibilities Awaiting for your response. Regards Rudaba
Dear Sir/Madam,

I hope you are in
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good
condition, as I want to know about that kingdom
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museum
is having exhibition for local and foreign travelers since 4 days and you are looking for volunteers.

It will be a great pleasure, if you hire me as a volunteer
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because
I am free at home
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because
my examination had
been finished
and I
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have to
utilize my expertise in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
place,
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so
I decided to
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join
as volunteers in the
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museum
as volunteer.

Fortunately
, I was previously
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very
much engage in seminar and
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symposia
in university
as well
as my duty was to perform as a volunteer. I had a quality and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
experience to handle and tackle huge group of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
. I can
easily
guide the placing and ways of going to
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different
areas as I visited the
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museum
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many time
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because
my mother was working there as a cashier in the ticket
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house
.

It is to inform you that I will be available in morning from
next
week
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because
in evening I had to look after the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
core activities. Kingdom
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museum
is
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very
near to mu home, I will do my best to reach on time, 15 minutes earlier
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before
its opening to manage the
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
responsibilities


Did you mean "awaiting" or "waiting for"?
Awaiting for
your response.

Regards

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Rudaba
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IELTS letter A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary unpaid work at the museum Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary /unpaid work. In your letter Explain why you want to do voluntary /unpaid work at the museum Describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful Give details of when you would be available for work.

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  American English
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213 words
6.0
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