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placed order from store , got it damaged write a letter to the manager

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Dear Sir or Ma, I am Akande Hajarat. I ordered a flower vase online from your store, Beautifully made boutique on 15th of January. My payment transaction was confirmed by one of your staffs named Adegoke and was told to expect it delivered to me on 17th January. I received the package yesterday but was found broken. The store sent the vase through a delivery agency which I believe mishandled it. The flower vase broken into pieces immediately it was opened. I could not present it to my little sister, had to look for substitute. I would kindly suggest you patronise a better courier service to prevent further occurrence of the same issue. In addition to this, the broken vase will be returned today, while I await a refund. I look forward to hear from you soon. Thanks for your consideration. Yours faithfully, Hajarat.
Dear Sir or Ma,

I am
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Akande
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Hajarat
. I ordered a flower
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vase
online from your store,
Beautifully
made boutique on 15th of January. My payment transaction
was confirmed
by one of your staffs named
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Adegoke
and was
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told
to
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expect
it delivered to me on 17th January. I received the package yesterday
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but
was found
broken.

The store
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sent
the
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vase
through a delivery agency which I believe mishandled it. The flower
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vase
broken into pieces immediately it
was opened
. I could not present it to my
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little
sister, had to look for substitute.

I would kindly suggest you
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patronise
a better courier service to
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prevent
further
occurrence of the same issue.
In addition
to this, the broken
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vase
will
be returned
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today
, while I await a refund. I look forward
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to hear
from you
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soon
.

Thanks for your consideration.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Hajarat
.
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IELTS letter placed order from store, got it damaged write a letter to the manager

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  American English
7 paragraphs
144 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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