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Outing Plans with Friends

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Dear Gray, How are you doing? Hope all is well! I would like to talk about our plans to spend time together with Paul. I set up a trip to Hokkaido, Japan which boasts spectacular ski ranges and offers exciting snow festivals. Hakodate, one of its major cities, has one of the best sky tower views. Furthermore, Sapporo, another well-known city, provides delectable dishes such as lamb barbeque and fish roe soup. Flights in business class seating have already been booked in advance. Our accommodation will be at Conrad Sapporo, a prestigious hotel in the area, which is famous for its five-star amenities and service. Transport between places has also been arranged, and we will be using GrabHerald, a well-reviewed private car service. Although majority of the trip has been planned, I will still need your help in identifying attractions to visit. You can include famous sites but please do consider off-the-beaten-path places as well. It will also be appreciated if you brainstorm on the possible activities that we can do when we arrive in these places. Thank you for taking the time to spend with us. I am looking forward to our upcoming excursion! Love, Carlo
Dear Gray,

How are you doing? Hope all is well! I would like to talk about our plans to spend time together with Paul.

I set up a trip to Hokkaido, Japan which boasts spectacular ski ranges and offers exciting snow festivals.
Hakodate
, one of its major cities, has one of the best sky tower views.
Furthermore
, Sapporo, another well-known city, provides delectable dishes such as lamb
barbeque
and fish roe soup.

Flights in business
class
seating have already
been booked
in advance. Our accommodation will be at Conrad Sapporo, a prestigious hotel in the area, which is
famous
for its five-star amenities and service. Transport between places has
also
been arranged
, and we will be using
GrabHerald
, a well-reviewed private car service.

Although
majority of
the trip has
been planned
, I will
still
need your
help
in identifying attractions to visit. You can include
famous
sites
but
please
do consider off-the-beaten-path places
as well
. It will
also
be appreciated
if you brainstorm on the possible activities that we can do when we arrive in these places.

Thank you for taking the time to spend with us. I am looking forward to our upcoming excursion!

Love
,

Carlo
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