Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

-describe a range of your academic interests, personal plans, and life experience that may bring diversity to academic life. Give your own examples/personal experience that illustrate what kind of diversity you can introduce to the University community, or a case that shows significance/relevance of the diversity for you;

-describe a range of your academic interests, personal plans, and life experience that may bring diversity to academic life. Give your own examples/personal experience that illustrate what kind of diversity you can introduce to the University community, or a case that shows significance/relevance of the diversity for you; O6QrE
Alau. My name means fire which never extinguishes as well as my willpower and faith in humanity. I am graduate of Nazarbayev Intellectual School and I would like to apply for Medical School of Medicine since I want my life to be in medicine. My choice fell on Nazarbayev University, because I fully intend not only to become qualified medical staff, but also to make a significant difference in Kazakhstani medicine. University provides all opportunities and room to grow up as remarkable medical practitioner because it offers the Republic's first curriculum based on the US education system, taught in English by a variety of biomedical teachers and high-qualified specialists from different countries. So I consider myself fully worth of being student of NU for several reasons. First thing is that my personality capable being responsible and innovative medical. Results of my Gallup test (The internal consistency reliability (Coefficient alpha) ranged from 0. 50 to 0. 75 across the 34 themes (Asplund et al. , 2007). The test-retest reliability with an interval of eight to 12 weeks ranged from 0. 52 to 0. 81 (Asplund et al. , 2007). ) can support my words: high restorative qualities with high self-assurance and empathy. Furthermore, I am good at multitasking since beside academic activities I could handle being dancer of school ensemble, Media ministress. Whenever I was I always sought to improve and develop my surrounding environment. That is why my ambitions grown over to society as a volunteer. Volunteering. I strongly believe that volunteer is the ones who sincerely and gratis citizens who really occupied with problems of society and make an action to solve it. As a volunteer I held NU Marathon (devoted to enrollment in NU), Poliglot (devoted to learning of different languages) and project devoted to enrollment in USA, consequently I would unhesitatingly do the same for NU to make a contribution in social life of university. Moreover, I have an unique idea to make a revolution in Kazakhstan's medicine system involving volunteers in it. I strongly support how last years medicine had changes such as medical insurance as well as the majority of countries with developed medicine such as South Korea and Germany. In addition, I would like to make annual screenings obligation. From my point of view, it is vital to raise self-awareness of people about their health instead of just free treatment. I also have made research about healthcare system in Kazakhstan and Coronovirus’s affect on it during my Global perspective and project works and Kazakhstan in modern world classes. I’m truly and sincerely concerned about Kazakhstan’s medicine and basically health care in our world, so I hope you let me make it real thanks to knowledge gained within walls of NUSOM.
Possible spelling mistake found.
Alau
. My name means fire which never extinguishes
as well
as my willpower and faith in humanity. I am graduate of
Possible spelling mistake found.
Nazarbayev
Intellectual School and I would like to apply for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Medical
School of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Medicine
since I want my life to be in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medicine
. My choice fell on
Possible spelling mistake found.
Nazarbayev
University,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
I
fully
intend not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
to become qualified
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medical
staff,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
a significant difference in
Possible spelling mistake found.
Kazakhstani
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medicine
. University provides all opportunities and room to grow up as remarkable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medical
practitioner
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it offers the Republic's
first
curriculum based on the US education system, taught in English by a variety of biomedical teachers and high-qualified specialists from
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
countries.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
I consider myself
fully
worth of being student of NU for several reasons.
First
thing is that my personality capable being responsible and innovative
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medical
. Results of my Gallup
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
test
(The internal consistency reliability (Coefficient alpha) ranged from 0. 50 to 0. 75 across the 34 themes (
Possible spelling mistake found.
Asplund
et al.
Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
,
2007). The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
test
-retest reliability with an interval of eight to 12 weeks ranged from 0. 52 to 0. 81 (
Possible spelling mistake found.
Asplund
et al.
Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
,
2007).
Loose punctuation mark.
)
can support my words: high restorative qualities with high self-assurance and empathy.
Furthermore
, I am
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
at multitasking since beside academic activities I could handle being dancer of school ensemble, Media
Possible spelling mistake found.
ministress
. Whenever I was I always sought to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
and develop my surrounding environment.
That is
why my ambitions grown over to society as a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
volunteer
. Volunteering. I
strongly
believe that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
volunteer
is the ones who
sincerely
and gratis citizens who
really
occupied with problems of society and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
an action to solve it. As a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
volunteer
I held NU Marathon (devoted to enrollment in NU),
Possible spelling mistake found.
Poliglot
(devoted to learning of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
languages) and project devoted to enrollment
A determiner is probably missing here: "in the USA".
in USA
,
consequently
I would
unhesitatingly
do the same for NU to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
a contribution in social life of university.
Moreover
, I have
Use "a" instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
an
unique
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
a revolution in Kazakhstan's
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medicine
system involving
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
volunteers
in it. I
strongly
support how last
Apostrophe might be missing. Did you mean "years'" or "year's"?
years
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medicine
had
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
such as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medical
insurance
as well
as the majority of countries with developed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medicine
such as South Korea and Germany.
In addition
, I would like to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
annual
Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean "screenings'" or "screening's"?
screenings
obligation. From my point of view, it is vital to raise self-awareness of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
about their health
instead
of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
free treatment. I
also
have made research about healthcare system in Kazakhstan and
Possible spelling mistake found.
Coronovirus
’s
Did you mean "effect"?
affect
on it during my Global perspective and project works and Kazakhstan in modern world classes.

I’m
truly
and
sincerely
concerned about Kazakhstan’s
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
medicine
and
basically
health care in our world,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I hope you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
make
it real thanks to knowledge gained within walls of
Possible spelling mistake found.
NUSOM
.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS letter -describe a range of your academic interests, personal plans, and life experience that may bring diversity to academic life. Give your own examples/personal experience that illustrate what kind of diversity you can introduce to the University community, or a case that shows significance/relevance of the diversity for you;

Letter
  American English
2 paragraphs
456 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts
  • 6band
    asking me for my opinion about camping
    Dear Nehir, I’m glad to take an e-mail that asking me for my opinion about camping which is my favourite hobby. I’m also excited about your best summer holiday you will probably collect unforgettable memories. In my opinion you would love to have a breakfast and walking around the near side of lak...
  • 6band
    Descibe your appearance and your personality
    Hello everyone, my name is Ngoc Y and I am 18 years old. I am tall and thin because I rarely eat sweets and recently I've been losing weight. I have an oval face, rosy lips, thick eyebrows that aren’t that dark. I have straight brown hair, bright black eyes, and I have inherited a straight nose from...
  • 5.5band
    Describe a place and a friend of you
    Hello, my name is Ngoc Y. Today, I will describe a place and a friend of you would like to visit. My best friend’s name is Hanh. My best friend lives in Nha Trang city. She lives near my house. We have been together for more than 7 years. Friends are very important in my life, but I usually see frie...
  • 5.5band
    Lunar new year biggest festival in Vietnam
    Hello everyone, to day I will tell you about my favourite festival in my country. In Vietnam, we have alot of festival but biggest festival is Lunar new year, which festival you can get more time with your family because in that day people can relax for not going to work and just enjoy that moment. ...
  • 5.5band
    Letter of asking help to applying for a job
    Dear Sandali, I am writing this letter to get some proper idea and help from you about applying for the vacancy of WSO2, which you informed me in the Google IO event last month. You may remember me as the speaker who delivered the presentation on Micro-Frontends, and we met in the after party of th...
  • 5.5band
    You are having unpleasant issue at work. Write a letter to your friend who does the same job as you in a different company and say. Describe your job, describe the issue that you have, ask your friend for some advice
    Dear Simon, Hope this letter finds you radiant health amd best of spirits. I am writing this letter to seeking you assistance about unpleasant issue, which occur at my work. As you know, I recently joined this company and I have no previous experience related to Accounting work and I am unable to so...