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Letter to a company manager

Letter to a company manager eEjRK
Dear smith, The purpose of this letter is to express my interest to work in our head office for next half of the year. Firstly, i want to tell that i learned many things here in this office i want to get hands on more experties in different sections of the company that i could use in future. Moreover i want to give handover to my assistant who knows very well rwgarsing my job nature she wl fullfill the responsibilites during my absence. I would like to ask help from you it wl be much appriciated if u could arrange my transfer to our head office Thank you Yout sincerily Xyz
Dear smith, The purpose of this letter is to express my interest to work in our head office for
next
half of the year.
Firstly
,
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i
want to
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tell
that
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i
learned
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many
things here in this office
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i
want to
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get
hands on more
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experties
in
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different
sections of the
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company
that
Did you mean "I"?
i
could
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use
Did you mean: "in the future"?
in future
.
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Moreover
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i
want to give handover to my assistant who knows
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very
well
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rwgarsing
my job nature
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she wl
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fullfill
the
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responsibilites
during my absence. I would like to ask
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help
from
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you
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it wl
be much
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appriciated
if u could arrange my transfer to our head
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office


Thank you
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Yout
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sincerily


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Xyz

IELTS letter Letter to a company manager

Letter
  American English
3 paragraphs
110 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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