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Letter to a friend who is thinking to go on a camping holiday

Letter to a friend who is thinking to go on a camping holiday kx0XN
Dear Andrew, I am excited to hear that you are looking to go for a camping holiday for the first time this summer and believe me this going to be fun. Since I have been on several camping trips and enjoyed them all, I am going to share my thoughts which may be useful to you in making your decision. Being nature lover, I think you will enjoy your trip as it involves some adventure like having a glimpse of natural wildlife and going across a lake. One of the special moment which I think you will be thrilled to witness is gazing the night sky full of stars. There are certain disadvantages due to unexpected weather change or getting hurt during the trip but gearing up with right tools would help you to continue and complete your trip. This is where you develop your determination but upto a certain extent for sure. I would be glad to come along with you this time as this time fits my schedule in early August if you are planning at the same time. By the way, this time is best to do camping and I am sure you will enjoy it. Hope to hear back from you soon. Best Wishes, John
Dear Andrew,

I
am excited
to hear that you are looking to go for a camping holiday for the
first
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time
this summer and believe me this going to be fun. Since I have been on several camping
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trips
and enjoyed them all, I am going to share my thoughts which may be useful to you in making your decision.

Being nature lover, I
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think
you will enjoy your
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trip
as it involves
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some
Did you mean "adventures"?
adventure
like having a glimpse of natural wildlife and going across a lake. One of the special moment which I
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think
you will
be thrilled
to witness is gazing the night sky full of stars.

There are certain disadvantages due to unexpected weather
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change
or getting hurt during the
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trip
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but
gearing up with right tools would
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help
you to continue and complete your
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trip
. This is where you develop your determination
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but
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upto
a certain extent for sure.

I would be glad to
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come
along with you this
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time
as this
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time
fits my schedule in early August if you are planning at the same
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time
. By the way, this
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time
is best to do
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camping and
I am sure you will enjoy it.

Hope to hear back from you
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soon
.

Best Wishes,

John
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IELTS letter Letter to a friend who is thinking to go on a camping holiday

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
208 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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