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Dear Mr. James, I am John, Senior manager at our firm who has been working for the past 1 year at Florida branch. This letter is regarding my temporary job transfer, at our company head office in Milan. As you are aware our company has launched a new product based upon software development. I would like to study and perform a detailed analysis of this product before introducing it to our customers. At first, I would like to understand the main usage of this product and work role before handing it out to customers. I have managed to back up my work in here by providing responsibilities to appropriate case managers; however I will be virtually available all the time to guide them from our head office. I have discussed with Mr. Andrews for an arrangement of this plan, Finally I am in need of your support for this job transfer, to get a detailed idea on our product to achieve 100% success. Hoping for a reply from you soon. Yours Sincerely, John Smith.

Dear Mr. James,

I am John, Senior manager at our firm who has been working for the past 1 year at Florida branch. This letter is regarding my temporary job transfer, at our This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisecorporation
company
 head office in Milan. “As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
 you are aware our This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisecorporation
company
 has launched a new You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcommodityprofitbrandworkamountcrop
product
 based upon software development. I would like to study and perform a detailed analysis of this You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcommodityprofitbrandworkamountcrop
product
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
 introducing it to our customers.

At first
, I would like to understand the main usage of this You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcommodityprofitbrandworkamountcrop
product
 and work role This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
 handing it out to customers. I have managed to back up my work in here by providing responsibilities to appropriate case managers; however
 I will be virtually
 available all the time to guide them from our head office.

I have discussed with Mr. Andrews for an arrangement of this plan, Finally
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get
 a detailed This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :thoughtconceptnotion
idea
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product
 to achieve 100% success.

Hoping for a reply from you This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:in the near future
soon
.

Yours Sincerely
,

John Smith. 

IELTS letter ! ou work (r an inteation, 1 company and wou[d lie to spend six months working in its had oce in anothr cou. Write a ler to our manage In our fetter • explain wh q want t  in·e compan� head oce or six months • sa how our wor cou be done while ou are awa • ask or her help in nging it

Letter

American English

7 paragraphs

174 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.0

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 6.5

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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