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One of your colleagues was in charge of organising an annual executive conference, and he/she has been successful in doing it. You want to congratulate your college for that.

One of your colleagues was in charge of organising an annual executive conference, and he/she has been successful in doing it. You want to congratulate your college for that. k2En
Dear Bryan, I hope you are doing well; I am writing this letter to you in order to congratulate you for organizing the annual conference event very successfully. As I know you put all your efforts so that this event can achieve its objective for which everyone was going to be gathered there to discuss the new policies for the company, whereas many people from head office were coming to attend this event. I would like to appreciate that you organized very well everything because of which all the event gone very smoothly, whereas everything which was required to be achieved on this conference accomplished very well. Everyone was very happy and liked the arrangements, whereas the venue for this was easily accessible by everyone. It would great if you arrange other events for instance sports events as you have skill of organizing things properly and it would great if use it on different occasions. I hope you will consider and this pursue this talent. Yours Sincerely Ryan
Dear Bryan,

I hope you are doing well; I am writing this letter to you in order to congratulate you for organizing the annual conference
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event
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very
successfully
. As I know you put all your efforts
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so
that this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
event
can achieve its objective for which everyone was going to
be gathered
there to discuss the new policies for the
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company
, whereas
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many
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people
from head office were coming to attend this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
.

I would like to appreciate that you organized
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
well everything
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because
of which all the
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event
gone
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
smoothly
, whereas everything which
was required
to
be achieved
on this conference accomplished
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
well. Everyone was
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
happy and liked the arrangements, whereas the venue for this was
easily
accessible by everyone.

It
The word 'great' is a noun or an adjective. A verb or adverb is missing or misspelled here, or maybe a comma is missing.
would great
if you arrange other
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events
for instance
sports
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
events
as you have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
of organizing things
properly
and it
The word 'great' is a noun or an adjective. A verb or adverb is missing or misspelled here, or maybe a comma is missing.
would great
if
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
it on
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
occasions. I hope you will consider and
The verb 'pursue' is plural. Did you mean: "this pursues"? Did you use a verb instead of a noun?
this pursue
this talent.

Yours
Sincerely


Ryan

IELTS letter One of your colleagues was in charge of organising an annual executive conference, and he/she has been successful in doing it. You want to congratulate your college for that.

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  American English
6 paragraphs
167 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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