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Once children start school teacher have more influence than parents on the intellectual and social development to what extent do you agree or

Once children start school teacher have more influence than parents on the intellectual and social development to what extent do you agree or gBnl
Students have many people around them who influence their life. But, when children start their academic career, the teacher role is far bigger than their parents. This essay will explain both the aspects of this statement and why teachers are more influence children rather than their parent. It is discussed in the following paragraphs. To embarks with, there are plenty of things which indicated that the teachers have a major role in behind children behaviour. First and foremost, students spend much more quality time in school with their teachers therefore, they get valuable information through a teacher. That will create an impact on students life. For example, Dr A. p. j Abdul kalam Sir was the most successful man and he says that; “All the argument was because of his math teacher”. Moreover, In students mind, the role model is only the teacher because they feel their teachers are the perfect person in the world. so, they start following the teacher's instruction, which helps them for building their career. That will develop their social and financial life. For example, Mr Mukesh Aman is the richest and social stable person, he followed teacher instruction honestly. However, sometimes children behaviour is upon their genes and their house atmosphere. Parents in the house also gendered impact on children mine which scene in their daily activity and thinking. In addition, if students came from a good background, they are definitely well in education and discipline. To conclude, students are influenced by their genes and home atmosphere but, the major role is up to their teachers because they spend lots of time in school. Overall, I strongly feel teachers generate a high impact on their behavior and character rather than parents.
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children
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their academic career, the
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teacher
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role
is far bigger than their
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parents
. This essay will
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explain
both the aspects of this statement and why
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teachers
are more influence
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children
rather
than their
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parent
. It
is discussed
in the following paragraphs.

To embarks with, there are
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plenty
of things which indicated that the
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teachers
have a major
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role
in behind
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children
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behaviour
.
First
and foremost,
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students
spend much more quality time in school with their
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teachers
therefore
, they
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get
valuable information through a
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teacher
. That will create an impact on
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students
life.
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, Dr A. p. j Abdul
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Sir was the most successful
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man and
he says that; “All the argument was
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because
of his math teacher”.

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, In
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mind, the
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model is
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the
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they feel their
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teachers
are the perfect person in the world.
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following the teacher's instruction, which
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helps
them for building their career. That will develop their social and financial life.
For example
, Mr Mukesh
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Aman
is the richest and social stable person, he followed
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instruction
honestly
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However
,
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children
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behaviour
is upon their genes and their
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house
atmosphere.
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Parents
in the
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also
gendered impact on
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children
mine which scene in their daily activity and thinking.
In addition
, if
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students
came from a
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good
background, they are definitely well in education and discipline.

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,
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students
are influenced
by their genes and home atmosphere
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but
, the major
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role
is up to their
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teachers
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because
they spend lots of time in school.
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, I
strongly
feel
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teachers
generate a high impact on their behavior and character
rather
than
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parents
.
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IELTS letter Once children start school teacher have more influence than parents on the intellectual and social development to what extent do you agree or

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286 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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