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On my birthday, I received many gifts but among all the gifts, the gift given to me by Sahar is liked by me the most and it is very helpful to me.

On my birthday, I received many gifts but among all the gifts, the gift given to me by Sahar is liked by me the most and it is very helpful to me. awOA7
Dear SaharLast weekend, I arranged my birthday party and I was glad to see you at my birthday party along with my other friends. It was a great fun we all had together. I enjoyed everything related to my birthday party but I am more happy with all birthday gifts that I received at the end of my party. Among all the birthday gifts, I liked your watch that you gave to me on my birthday. There are several reasons I liked your gifts as compared to other gifts. The first reason is that I was planning to buy a watch because my old watch was broken. Secondly, I am a punctual person and the gift you gave me will help me to become more punctual and it will also help me to remember the importance of time. There are many other gifts that I received from my other friends. Some of them are beautiful dress, photo frame, makeup kit and so on. Once again, I would like to thank you for the wonderful gift. Lots of LoveGemini
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weekend, I arranged my birthday
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party and
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along with my
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party
. Among all the birthday
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, I liked your
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watch
that you gave to me on my birthday. There are several reasons I liked your
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as compared to
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, I am a punctual person and the
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me to become more punctual and it will
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me to remember the importance of time. There are
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friends.
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of them are
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on. Once again, I would like to thank you for the wonderful
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. Lots of
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IELTS letter On my birthday, I received many gifts but among all the gifts, the gift given to me by Sahar is liked by me the most and it is very helpful to me.

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