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My name is Brahmi Mehdi, one of the staff of your company's headquarters which is located in London and I am writing on behalf of my colleagues to express our concern about the working environment here which has become overwhelming mainly due to some recent changes.

My name is Brahmi Mehdi, one of the staff of your company's headquarters which is located in London and I am writing on behalf of my colleagues to express our concern about the working environment here which has become overwhelming mainly due to some recent changes. KGx3N
Dear Mr Paul, My name is Brahmi Mehdi, one of the staff of your company's headquarters which is located in London and I am writing on behalf of my colleagues to express our concern about the working environment here which has become overwhelming mainly due to some recent changes. Well, two employees have joined us recently and, as you already know, the office's surface cannot bear more than three people. As a result, the office has become overcrowded as we can hardly find space either to move around or to pile up our documents. To put an end to this overwhelming situation, I humbly request you to arrange the adjacent room to our office which is used as an archive given to the fact that most archived documents thereare outdated and thus, they should be thrown away. To enlarge the bureau, I recommend annexing it to the archive. Moreover, the archive's painting is quite ancient and peeled off and hence, it should be renewed. I hope you will consider our request and we are looking forward to your prompt reply. Yours sincerely, Mehdi.
Dear Mr Paul,

My name is
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Brahmi
Mehdi, one of the staff of your
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company
's headquarters which
is located
in
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London and
I am writing on behalf of my colleagues to express our concern about the working environment here which has become overwhelming
mainly
due to
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some
recent
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changes
.

Well, two employees have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
joined
us recently and, as you already know, the office's surface cannot bear more than three
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.
As a result
, the office has become overcrowded as we can hardly find space either to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
around or to pile up our documents.

To put an
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
to this overwhelming situation, I
humbly
request you to arrange the adjacent room to our office which is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
as an archive
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given
to the fact that most archived documents
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thereare
outdated and
thus
, they should
be thrown
away.

To enlarge the bureau, I recommend annexing it to the archive.
Moreover
, the archive's painting is quite ancient and peeled off and
hence
, it should
be renewed
.

I hope you will consider our
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
request and
we are looking forward to your prompt reply.

Yours
sincerely
,

Mehdi.

IELTS letter My name is Brahmi Mehdi, one of the staff of your company's headquarters which is located in London and I am writing on behalf of my colleagues to express our concern about the working environment here which has become overwhelming mainly due to some recent changes.

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