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Your friend is going to a camping holiday for the first time. Write a letter

Your friend is going to a camping holiday for the first time. Write a letter 75l63
Dear Helen, I hope this letter finds you well. I heard that you were thinking of going on a camping holiday in Sudbury this summer. Remember how we used to camp out in my backyard in that old brown tent? I can still feel the cold breeze and can hear the chirping of the crickets at night. It was such a daring adventure for a couple of 5th graders. If you're contemplating the idea of going on a camping holiday, take my sisterly advice and just do it. I promise you that it would be the most amazing and insightful adventure you'd ever take part in. Outdoor camping especially is notorious for being life-altering. I think you will love the holiday since you enjoy hiking, scavenger hunting in the wilderness, and cooking. Having said that, camping is also known for being a bit disgusting for some people. You will be one with nature in more ways than you would think. You should be prepared to face all sorts of insects on your trip. Thankfully, you can fight them off simply with a can of bug spray and other insect-repellants. Another problem that you might come across is the weather. So, ensure that you check what the weather is like before embarking on your trip. I for one would absolutely love to have an outdoor camping holiday this summer. If we were going together, we make lots of wonderful memories! Since I am an expert in outdoor camping, you could even learn some pointers from me for the future. We could reminisce our childhood adventures under a blanket of stars. Would you like me to join you this time since it is your first experience ever? Let me know if you're up for a spectacular camping trip with yours truly. With love, Aleesha Najeeb
Dear Helen,

I hope this letter finds you well. I heard that you were thinking of going on a camping
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holiday
in
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Sudbury
this summer. Remember how we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to camp out in my backyard in that
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old
brown tent? I can
still
feel the
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cold
breeze and can hear the chirping of the crickets at night. It was such a daring adventure for a couple of 5th graders. If you're contemplating the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of going on a camping
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
holiday
, take my
sisterly
advice and
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just
do it. I promise you that it would be the most amazing and insightful adventure you'd ever
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take part
in. Outdoor camping
especially
is notorious for being life-altering. I
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think
you will
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love
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
holiday
since you enjoy hiking, scavenger hunting in the wilderness, and cooking. Having said that, camping is
also
known for being a bit disgusting for
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some
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people
. You will be one with nature in more ways than you would
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think
. You should
be prepared
to face all sorts of insects on your trip.
Thankfully
, you can fight them off
simply
with a can of bug spray and other
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insect-repellants
. Another problem that you might
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come
across is the weather.
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So
, ensure that you
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check
what the weather is like
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before
embarking on your trip. I for one would
absolutely
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love
to have an outdoor camping
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
holiday
this summer. If we were going together, we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
lots of wonderful memories! Since I am an expert in outdoor camping, you could even learn
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
pointers from me for the future. We could reminisce our childhood adventures under a blanket of stars. Would you like me to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
you this time since it is your
first
experience ever?
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Let
me know if you're up for a spectacular camping trip with yours
truly
.

With
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love
,

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Aleesha
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Najeeb
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IELTS letter Your friend is going to a camping holiday for the first time. Write a letter

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6.0
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