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Write a letter to a friend who works in a foreign country expressing your interest to seek employment in a different country. v. 1

Dear Sindhu, Hope this letter finds you and your family in good health. I am sorry for not writing to you for a long but I guess you can realise my hectic schedule for the past couple of weeks since I wrote about it in my previous letter. I have decided to work in Australia and expecting your opinion regarding this. Now, a sigh of relief! My project works are complete and I am looking for a new opportunity to work abroad. You know me well - I have always wanted to make life enjoyable by making positive changes and I have recently decided to work and live in a multi-cultural environment. I think it would be fascinating to socialise with people of different origins while I can further enhance my career and live in a better environment. Thus I am looking forward to getting a job in Biomedical Engineering, as I always did, in Australia as a permanent employee either in a manufacturing or a service-related company. So, I need some information from you since you have already been to different countries and now in Australia in the same industry. Is it mandatory for me to get a work permit or can I migrate with a temporary work visa and later find a job? Should I take any exams like IELTS or TOEFL? If so what would be the score requirement? And finally, can I apply for some jobs before moving to Australia? Looking forward to hearing your response in this regards. We will find some time soon. Convey my regards to your family. Warm wishes, Nivetha

IELTS letter Write a letter to a friend who works in a foreign country expressing your interest to seek employment in a different country. v.1

Dear
Sindhu
,

Hope this letter finds you and your family in
good
health. I am sorry for not writing to you for a long
but
I guess you can
realise
my hectic schedule for the past couple of weeks since I wrote about it in my previous letter. I have decided to
work
in Australia and expecting your opinion regarding this.

Now
, a sigh of relief! My project works are
complete and
I am looking for a new opportunity to
work
abroad. You know me well
-
I have always wanted to
make
life enjoyable by making
positive
changes
and I have recently decided to
work
and
live
in a multi-cultural environment. I
think
it would be fascinating to
socialise
with
people
of
different
origins while I can
further
enhance my career and
live
in a better environment.

Thus
I am looking forward to getting a job in Biomedical Engineering, as I always did, in Australia as a permanent employee either in a manufacturing or a service-related
company
.
So
, I need
some
information from you since you have already been to
different
countries and
now
in Australia in the same industry. Is it mandatory for me to
get
a
work
permit or can I migrate with a temporary
work
visa and later find a job? Should I take any exams like IELTS or TOEFL? If
so
what would be the score requirement? And
finally
, can I apply for
some
jobs
before
moving to Australia?

Looking forward to hearing your response in
this
regards. We will find
some
time
soon
. Convey my regards to your family.

Warm wishes,

Nivetha
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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267 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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