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moreover,when children have access only computers and internet they could not realize the negative sides of the Internet such as games or fraud online, and therefore, they are tempted into illegal activities and turn themselves into criminals. Instead, building schools and hiring teachers would permanently solve the problem. Teachers provide not only academic but also moral and social knowledge to help young people form logical and critical thinking as well as become good citizens in the future.

moreover, when children have access only computers and internet they could not realize the negative sides of the Internet such as games or fraud online, and therefore, they are tempted into illegal activities and turn themselves into criminals. Instead, building schools and hiring teachers would permanently solve the problem. Teachers provide not only academic but also moral and social knowledge to help young people form logical and critical thinking as well as become good citizens in the future. 1bo8X
moreover, when children have access only computers and internet they could not realize the negative sides of the Internet such as games or fraud online, and therefore, they are tempted into illegal activities and turn themselves into criminals. Instead, building schools and hiring teachers would permanently solve the problem. Teachers provide not only academic but also moral and social knowledge to help young people form logical and critical thinking as well as become good citizens in the future.
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IELTS letter moreover, when children have access only computers and internet they could not realize the negative sides of the Internet such as games or fraud online, and therefore, they are tempted into illegal activities and turn themselves into criminals. Instead, building schools and hiring teachers would permanently solve the problem. Teachers provide not only academic but also moral and social knowledge to help young people form logical and critical thinking as well as become good citizens in the future.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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