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Misinformation in a magazine article. Letter to editor.

Misinformation in a magazine article. Letter to editor. wa8xd
Dear Sir or Madam, I am a resident of town Bristol, and I am writing this letter to highlight an error in the article published in your magazine last Sunday October 12th 2020. In the article, you have given a vivid description of beautiful heritage architecture, buzzing cafes and restaurants, scenic parks and lakes surrounding the town. It's a near perfect portrayal of a tourist destination. However, there is a section in the article which mentions that the crime rate has been steadily increasing in the town due to growing number of tourists. This is an entirely inaccurate representation of the fact. If you check the statistics published by the city office, it says that due to the flourishing tourism in the town, not only the city revenue has increased manifold, but the standard of living of the residents has also improved substantially. In fact, due to growing income, city council has deployed more police personnel to ensure effective maintenance of law and order. Your magazine has a large readership and such an error could drive the tourists away from this town leading to significant losses. I request you to rectify the error immediately by sending out a press release and republishing the article with the error highlighted and rectified. I have the cited the source of the correct information from city office at the end of the letter for your reference. Sincerely, Tom Martin
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am a resident of
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Bristol, and I am writing this letter to highlight an
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error
in the
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article
published in your magazine last
Commas set off the month in a weekday-month-day date: "Sunday,".
Sunday
October 12th 2020.

In the
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article
, you have
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given
a vivid description of
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beautiful
heritage architecture, buzzing
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cafes
and restaurants, scenic parks and lakes surrounding the
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town
. It's a near perfect portrayal of a tourist destination.
However
, there is a section in the
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article
which mentions that the crime rate has been
steadily
increasing in the
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town
due to growing number of tourists. This is an
entirely
inaccurate representation of the fact. If you
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check
the statistics published by the city office, it says that due to the flourishing tourism in the
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town
, not
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only
the city revenue has increased manifold,
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but
the standard of living of the residents has
also
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improved
substantially
. In fact, due to growing income, city council has deployed more police personnel to ensure effective maintenance of law and order.

Your magazine has a large readership and such an
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error
could drive the tourists away from this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
town
leading to significant losses. I request you to rectify the
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error
immediately by sending out a press release and republishing the
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article
with the
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error
highlighted and rectified. I have the cited the source of the correct information from city office at the
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end
of the letter for your reference.

Sincerely
,

Tom Martin
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IELTS letter Misinformation in a magazine article. Letter to editor.

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
234 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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