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Looking for a job in another country 7aJ56

Hello my name is Carol. Pointing to words the advertisement of offering you have made in the maximum. I would like to be considered for the position. I really would like to work with you because working in Australia would define exploration to new cultures and people. I love making friends from far off places. I am patience, Tidy, reliable and hard-working. In total I have three years of prior experience into looking after children. Currently I am working with an Irish family and taking care of varied ages of children ranging from 3 to 8. I’ve never thought in my dreams that home crutching would be so fruitful for my career. I would really like to explore Australia during my free time, learning English will also be in my itinerary. Visiting tourist attraction, and trying different cuisines food in making new friends will be heading on my list. I’m really pleased, that you spend a little time considering my letter and let me know if I am the suitable person for this job.

Hello my name is Carol. Pointing to The verb after "to" should be in the base form: "word".word
words
 the The usual collocation for "advertisement" is "for" not "of". Did you mean "advertisement for"?advertisement for
advertisement of
 offering you have made in the maximum. I would like to be considered
 for the position. I really
 would like to work with you This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 working in Australia would define exploration to new cultures and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :admireadore
love
 making friends from far off places. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 am patience, Tidy, reliable and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :arduous
hard
-working.

In The comma is probably missing here: "total, I".total, I
total I
 have three years of prior experience into looking after children. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Currently,
Currently
 I am working with an Irish family and taking care of varied ages of children ranging from 3 to 8. I’ve never This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonedassumedbelievedconsidered
thought
 in my dreams that home crutching would be This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 fruitful for my career.

I would really
 like to explore Australia during my free time, learning English will also
 be in my itinerary. Visiting tourist attraction, and trying This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
different
Apostrophe might be missing. Did you mean "cuisines'" or "cuisine's"?cuisines'cuisine's
cuisines
 food in making new friends will be heading on my list.

I’m really
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :satisfied
pleased
, that you spend a This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
little
 time considering my letter and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
let
 me know if I am the suitable person for this job. 