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Live with family and take care of six-year-old child

Live with family and take care of six-year-old child gW22D
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in reference to your advert in the magazine, regarding a person who can stay at your place and take care of the kid for a short period. I am confident that I will be able to meet your requirements as I am very good in taking care of the house and the kids. I love cooking and if you like Indian curries, I can make vegetarian curries and nan. It will be a very good opportunity for myself. I am eldest in the family and have been taking care of my younger brother and sister while my parents were at work. I find myself very comfortable with the children and know to feed, take care, and engage them in various activities. My neigbhours would be ready to vouch for my abilities as on several occasion I have baby-sitted their kids. I arrived earlier in Australia to get acquantied with the culture and lifestyle before I plan to apply for post-graduate courses. Meanwhile, I will be reseaching course options and preparing for the admission formalities in the top tier universities. I am looking for options that will allow me to work and earn money to manage expenses for 6-9 months. In anticipation for a reply from you. Yours faithfully Gaurav
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing in reference to your advert in the magazine, regarding a person who can stay at your place and take
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care
of the kid for a short period. I am confident that I will be able to
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meet
your requirements as I am
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very
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good in taking
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care
of the
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house
and the kids.
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I
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love
cooking and if you like Indian curries, I can
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make
vegetarian curries and
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nan
. It will be a
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very
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good
opportunity for myself.

I am eldest in the family and have been taking
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
care
of my younger brother and sister while my parents were at work. I find myself
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
comfortable with the children and know to feed, take
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
care
, and engage them in various activities. My
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neigbhours
would be ready to vouch for my abilities as on
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several occasion
I have
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baby-sitted
their kids.

I arrived earlier in Australia to
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get
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acquantied
with the culture and lifestyle
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before
I plan to apply for post-graduate courses. Meanwhile, I will be
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reseaching
course options and preparing for the admission formalities in the top tier universities. I am looking for options that will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
me to work and earn money to manage expenses for 6-9 months.

In anticipation for a reply from you.

Yours
faithfully


Gaurav
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IELTS letter Live with family and take care of six-year-old child

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  American English
6 paragraphs
215 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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