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Letter: Write the principal of the international college to suggest that the college should start a bus service for the collefe: describe the problems, reasons, asses the beneficts

Letter: Write the principal of the international college to suggest that the college should start a bus service for the collefe: describe the problems, reasons, asses the beneficts g82Q7
Dear principal, I am writing on behalf of a number of members of an international group of students, who is concerned with the way the college is communicated with Zaragoza, having several difficulties to arrive from our accommodations to university, as it is placed on the outskirts of the city. First of all, it has been clear to us that we have a transport problem. The public options have not a wide range of frequencies, if the bus is missed, the next one takes 30 minutes to arrive. Not only do we have to wait for a another one, but also is overcrowded when comes and there are several stops during the route. To top it off, there is a lack of college bus offer, a downside that might make new potential candidates chose more accessible alternatives. As to what action can be taken, our main suggestion is to offer a private bus college service, setting up a fund from the students’ taxes. This service should provide several routes from different points of the city in order to bring faster routes, as well as something along the lines of implementing the schedules should be considered. For this reason, we suggest getting one every ten minutes. We believe that if these suggestions are implemented, both the college and the local area will benefit as more foreign students are bound to choose this university, what could improve the local economy, contributing to bring the city and its counterparts closer together. We trust that you will consider our ideas and we would be grateful if you could look into making the improvement we have suggested as soon as possible. Yours faithfully, Ariadna Moreno
Dear principal,

I am writing on behalf of a number of members of an international group of students, who
is concerned
with the way the college
is communicated
with Zaragoza, having several difficulties to arrive from our accommodations to university, as it
is placed
on the outskirts of the city.

First of all
, it has been
clear
to us that we have a transport problem. The public options have not a wide range of frequencies, if the bus
is missed
, the
next
one takes 30 minutes to arrive. Not
only
do we
have to
wait for
a
another one,
but
also
is overcrowded
when
comes
and there are several
stops
during the route. To top it off, there is a lack of college bus offer, a downside that might
make
new potential candidates chose more accessible alternatives.

As to what action can
be taken
, our main suggestion is to offer a private bus college service, setting up a fund from the students’ taxes. This service should provide several routes from
different
points of the city in order to bring faster routes,
as well
as something along the lines of implementing the schedules should
be considered
.
For this reason
, we suggest getting one every ten minutes.

We believe that if these suggestions
are implemented
, both the college and the local area will benefit as more foreign students
are bound
to choose this university, what could
improve
the local economy, contributing to bring the city and its counterparts closer together. We trust that you will consider our
ideas and
we would be grateful if you could look into making the improvement we have suggested as
soon
as possible.

Yours
faithfully
,

Ariadna
Moreno
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IELTS letter Letter: Write the principal of the international college to suggest that the college should start a bus service for the collefe: describe the problems, reasons, asses the beneficts

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
279 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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