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Letter to a reataurant manager to organise a party

Letter to a reataurant manager to organise a party GMJjx
Dear Sir or Madam, I am jasleen kaur and i visit your restaurant Calen often. I am pleased with the excellent services and delicious food that is served with great hospitality.  I am writing this letter to book a banquet hall for the birthday party on 30 April, 2021. The party that i want to host is on the occasion of my sister’s birthday. There will be approximately 50 people invited on this party. So, the food and sitting arrangement will be needed to done accordingly. I would like to follow the unicorn theme, the details of the theme i would like to discuss with your in-house decorator. In the food menu, Asian and western dishes have to be included. There will be both vegetarion and non-vegeterian cuisine in the menu. I would like to reserve a corner for DJ and dance floor. I would appreaciate if you would discuss about the further details of booking the banquet hall and the cost of the arrangement over the weekend. Looking forward for your response. Yours faithfully, Jasleen Kaur
Dear Sir or Madam, I am
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jasleen
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kaur
and
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i
visit your restaurant
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Calen
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often
. I am
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pleased
with the excellent services and delicious food that
is served
with great hospitality.  I am writing this letter to book a banquet hall for the birthday party on 30
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April, 2021
. The party that
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i
want to host is on the occasion of my sister’s birthday. There will be approximately 50
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people
invited on this party.
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So
, the food and sitting arrangement will
be needed
to done
accordingly
. I would like to follow the unicorn theme, the
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details
of the theme
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i
would like to discuss with your in-
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house
decorator. In the food menu, Asian and western dishes
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have to
be included
. There will be both
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vegetarion
and
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non-vegeterian
cuisine in the menu. I would like to reserve a corner for DJ and dance floor. I would
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appreaciate
if you would
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discuss about the
further
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details
of booking the banquet hall and the cost of the arrangement over the weekend. Looking forward for your response. Yours
faithfully
,
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Jasleen
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Kaur

IELTS letter Letter to a reataurant manager to organise a party

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
176 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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