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letter to a friend to help for getting a getting a part time job abroad

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Dear Annie, I hope you are doing well. I am writing to you to share my student visa approval. Finally, I got my process done after one refusal. I enrolled in Oxford University for the MBA Program. The University provides 2-years courses with a post-study visa which allows students to get a job. I have selected this program as its high in demand globally. Its all motivating join Oxford University and enhance my skills and knowledge in the administration area. I would like to get a part-time job, Projects, books, stationery expenses can easily be covered by an evening job. As you are the local of the area it is easy for you to give a referral and help me in getting a job which can cover all my small expenses as mentioned earlier. I look forward to meeting you. Best wishes,
Dear Annie,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing to you to share my student visa approval.
Finally
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
my process done after one refusal. I enrolled in Oxford University for the MBA Program. The University provides 2-years courses with a post-study visa which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allows
students to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a job. I have selected this program as its high in demand globally.

Did you mean "it's" (="it is") instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Its
all motivating
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
Oxford University and enhance my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and knowledge in the administration area. I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a part-time job, Projects, books, stationery expenses can
easily
be covered
by an evening job.

As you are the local of the area it is easy for you to give a referral and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me in getting a job which can cover all my
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
expenses as mentioned earlier.

I look forward to meeting you.

Best wishes,
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IELTS letter letter to a friend to help for getting a getting a part time job abroad

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
142 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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