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letter to a friend on relocating to a new country

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Dear Emma, I am sorry I have not been writing to you lately, I am sure you will be understanding once I tell you all my recent adventures. As you know I have moved to Canada last month, and ever since I have been trying to catch my breath in a very hectic daily life. You will be surprised to know that I am writing to you in a bus on my way to a job interview, as this is the only free time I have today. If I delay this further, I am afraid I will not have the chance to write to you for another eternity. The weather is very cold, as one would imagine. However, I am enjoying wearing all the stylish winter clothing we got together prior to my travel. For the last few weeks, I have been house hunting. Luckily, I found a beautiful house by the forest that comes with an excellent heating system. I have also been job hunting and you will be proud to know that I have landed three interviews last week. one of which is at Howard’s company, so I will be pursuing my dream career as a game designer. Let me know how your studies are going. I am Looking forward to hearing from you. Best regards, Nemat
Dear Emma,

I am sorry I have not been writing to you lately, I am sure you will
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be understanding
once I
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tell
you all my recent adventures.

As you
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know
I have
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moved
to Canada last month, and ever since I have been trying to catch my breath in a
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very
hectic daily life. You will
be surprised
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
know
that I am writing to you in a bus on my way to a job interview, as this is the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
free time I have
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today
. If I delay this
further
, I am afraid I will not have the chance to write to you for another eternity.

The weather is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
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cold
, as one would imagine.
However
, I am enjoying wearing all the stylish winter clothing we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
together prior to my travel. For the last few weeks, I have been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
hunting. Luckily, I found a
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beautiful
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house
by the forest that
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comes
with an excellent heating system.

I have
also
been job hunting and you will be proud to
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know
that I have landed three interviews last week.
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one
of which is at Howard’s
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company
,
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so
I will be pursuing my dream career as a game designer.

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Let
me
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
know
how your studies are going. I am Looking forward to hearing from you.

Best regards,

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IELTS letter letter to a friend on relocating to a new country

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
218 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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