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Letter for delays in local transport

Letter for delays in local transport m91Mq
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to draw your attention to the issues related to local bus service in Tonbridge. I take 7. 30 am bus from Tonbridge to Oakhill to reach my office. This week the bus arrived 10 minutes late each day and I was not able to find a seat for myself due to overcrowding. It is not only with me, but other passengers are also facing similar problems with overcrowding and delays in reaching to their respective destinations due to late service. This is leading to the increase in frustration and inconvenience as people have to stand during their entire journey which is really tiresome. I would like to suggest that in order to address these concerns, please increase the number of buses on this route during the peak hours. In addition to this, ensure that the buses are arriving on time. I hope you will address these concerns and look into this matter on priority. Yours faithfully Sam Williams
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to draw your attention to the issues related to local bus service in
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Tonbridge
.

I take 7. 30 am bus from
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Tonbridge
to
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Oakhill
to reach my office. This week the bus arrived 10 minutes late each
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day and
I was not able to find a seat for myself due to overcrowding.

It is not
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only
with me,
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but
other passengers are
also
facing similar problems with overcrowding and delays in reaching to their respective destinations due to late service. This is leading to the increase in frustration and inconvenience as
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people
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have to
stand during their entire journey which is
really
tiresome.

I would like to suggest that in order to address these concerns,
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please
increase the number of buses on this route during the peak hours.
In addition
to this, ensure that the buses are arriving on time.

I hope you will address these concerns and look into this matter on priority.

Yours
faithfully


Sam Williams

IELTS letter Letter for delays in local transport

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
166 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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