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Last year you met someone on holiday and became friends. He/she has informed you that they will be travelling near your hometown on business in a few months’ time. v.1

Last year you met someone on holiday and became friends. He/she has informed you that they will be travelling near your hometown on business in a few months’ time. v. 1
It was a pleasant surprise to receive your letter yesterday. The happiness doubled when I learnt that you will be in Singapore in December with your wife for some professional reasons and have plans to stay a bit longer to wander around the city. I am quite excited to meet you and your wife and cordially welcome you to stay with us as long as you wish. Our memory, together in Bali, Indonesia last year, is still fresh and I am happy to have the chance to meet you in a distant country. How daunting it would have been if someone kind like you did not find the papers I lost! You were like an angel sent by God to save me from a disaster. The more I learned about you, the more attached I felt to you as a friend. I live in an apartment located in the centre of Singapore city with my wife and have a spare room that you can use during your stay. My wife, Eugene, is equally excited to have you in our city. After you complete your professional works, we will visit some notable places like the Marina Bay Sands, Gardens by the Bay, Chinatown, Changi Chapel and Museum and enjoy local foods and movies. I am looking forward to having you with us. Have a safe journey. Warm wishes, Adrian
It was a pleasant surprise to receive your letter yesterday. The happiness doubled when I
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learnt
that you will be in Singapore in December with your
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wife
for
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some
professional reasons and have plans to stay a bit longer to wander around the city. I am quite excited to
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meet
you and your
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wife
and
cordially
welcome you to stay with us as long as you wish.

Our memory, together in Bali, Indonesia last year, is
still
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fresh and
I am happy to have the chance to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
you in a distant country. How daunting it would have been if someone kind like you did not find the papers I lost! You were like an angel
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
by God to save me from a disaster. The more I learned about you, the more attached I felt to you as a friend.

I
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live
in an apartment located in the
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centre
of Singapore city with my
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wife
and have a spare room that you can
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use
during your stay. My
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wife
, Eugene, is
equally
excited to have you in our city. After you complete your professional works, we will visit
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
notable places like the Marina Bay Sands, Gardens by the Bay, Chinatown,
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Changi
Chapel and Museum and enjoy local foods and movies.

I am looking forward to having you with us. Have a safe journey.

Warm wishes,

Adrian
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS letter Last year you met someone on holiday and became friends. He/she has informed you that they will be travelling near your hometown on business in a few months’ time. v. 1

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
227 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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